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Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

0 posted 2003-09-18 06:04 PM

The sky was paler
than the cheek of a melancholy romantic.
The streaks of melting snow
bulged like veins on the lonely rooftops.
There was something about the view that was quite enchanting.
I walked,
reciting “The Love Song of J. Alfred Prufrock,”
smoking Marlboro Lights
and admiring the spiraling smoke.
The morning was wonderful and I couldn’t put my finger on it,
but it seemed out of the ordinary,
as if I awoke
to find out existence had meaning,
and I stumbled upon it.
No, it had nothing to do with either of us.
This wasn’t the point.
It was more about rhyming couplets and iambic pentameter.
As a whole,
existence resembled a well-written poem
and I picked up its rhythm on the cobble-stone avenue.
Suddenly,
before my eyes,
the city of Boston turned into a living being.
Its
long
winding
alleyways
resembled the reaching tentacles of an octopus.
Crowds of people were walking outside,
unaware of the fact
that North End was breathing.
I overheard its monotone whispers and its words were fabulous.
I stood, thunderstruck and short of breath...
life was dazzling.
Suddenly, it dawned on me that today and yesterday
in no way differed.
I was always too busy, rushing somewhere and hustling.
Life fell in love with me,
and somehow,
I've managed to stay indifferent...

Check out my poetry here:

http://www.unknownpoets.com/db/authors/master

[This message has been edited by Master (09-19-2003 01:42 AM).]

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

1 posted 2003-09-18 07:25 PM

Andrey~
You sooooo took me there ... it cries for a title !
May I be so bold ? ... Monotone Whispers ~

I REALLY love it~

AND ... 'Life fell in love with me'
just expresses so much to me~

ALWAYS enjoy your writings~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

Master
Senior Member

since 1999-08-18

Posts 1867
Boston, MA

2 posted 2003-09-18 08:03 PM

Thank you Marge for the kind words and a wonderful title...

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2003-09-18 08:16 PM

It is one of your best...

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

4 posted 2003-09-18 08:55 PM

I like this one Master.
It sounds like someone I know.

:-)

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2003-09-18 10:04 PM

Me smile - BIG~

You're such a sweetheart~
With a HUGE talent !!!
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
noles1@totcon.com

mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

6 posted 2003-09-18 10:10 PM

wow, so real. boston is the place my soul yearns to roam. my favorite city in the world. i could feel everything in your words. enchanting reality, beautiful depth.

and even when everything was wrong, and we were mad at the world, it was still beautiful.

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