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Martie
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0 posted 2003-09-17 06:03 PM



Slowly air moves through the open door
onto the inside of my arm
then begs the corner of my eye
to watch

as it turns a small thread of web
into a gold chain even as I look away
feeling like I can’t bare to know
how fragile this one thing is
and how carelessly it can be destroyed
but I have already seen it
connecting the wooden door frame
to the file cabinet full of papers

I see how it is set on fire with perfect sunlight
as if trying to take the place of bare feet  
and the sound of summer’s children
gone and replaced with slamming car doors
and crows quarreling across these words

Slowly air moves into the voices of the leaves

over my shoulder I feel a goodbye
it is made from the slipping of summer
and I turn hoping to catch
one last whispered word
with listening naked eyes

but there is only the sound of leaves

© Copyright 2003 Martie Odell Ingebretsen - All Rights Reserved
vlraynes
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1 posted 2003-09-17 06:10 PM



Oh my, Martie...this is so beautiful, yet left
me with such a feeling of sadness...and loss.

Big hugs to you, my friend...love you much...

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

MorninGlory
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2 posted 2003-09-17 06:22 PM


This is exquisite, absolutely beautiful. I could hear that air rustling, nice, good visual images here!  Great job!

~ becky

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3 posted 2003-09-17 07:05 PM


with listening naked eyes
===========================

which is exactly why you write with such exceptional vision...and why I seek enlightenment thru your poetic perception.

"If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ...
Lightning strikes and all you see is blue ... this is me missing you"

JH

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4 posted 2003-09-17 07:29 PM


Soft and sweet and gentle and good. What a wonderful expression of what it's like inside the vision of a beautiful poet in a beautiful mood.

I love this. That's all I can say about it.

Corinne
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5 posted 2003-09-17 07:36 PM


Martie - how soft and lovely this is! I love the idea of the breeze calling out to you, catching your eye!

Corinne

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6 posted 2003-09-17 11:03 PM


"feeling like I can’t bare to know
how fragile this one thing is
and how carelessly it can be destroyed..."

Sometimes things are stronger than they seem!

*smile*

Great work!!!!  Thank you for sharing it.

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7 posted 2003-09-17 11:14 PM


Beautiful dear Martie...love this keeper.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~


~ I love your glances meeting mine
     across forever or the room ~

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8 posted 2003-09-18 10:48 AM


Very nice Martie. This is as fine a piece as any of read. A keeper for sure. Thanks for posting it. I love the imagery you created in this. It is so sweet and lovely. Thanks!
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9 posted 2003-09-18 11:07 AM


Slowly air moves into the voices of the leaves

You write a poem in one phrase... awesome!

But what a beautiful whole this is... your listening eyes gift us with treasure.

Bill Charles
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10 posted 2003-09-18 11:10 AM


Martie - stunning verse from your pen.

'over my shoulder I feel a goodbye
it is made from the slipping of summer
and I turn hoping to catch
one last whispered word
with listening naked eyes

but there is only the sound of leaves'

almost reminds me of a love lost, touched me it did...

BC

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11 posted 2003-09-18 11:16 AM




Soooooo.....lovely....
If she hasn't seen it yet [and I haven't looked], JM will love the alliteration....

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12 posted 2003-09-18 09:22 PM


And I will love ALL of it! You create tension without being tense, drama without being dramatic, color without making it colorful, art without artyness.

Reading a poem of yours is like looking at a spun glass figurine -- I could swear it's alive, except that it's too beautiful to live.

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13 posted 2003-09-18 09:32 PM


Martie....poetic perfection.  The slipping
of Summer as Autumn nears.  A time when the
leaves silently fall to their place of rest.

Thanx Dear One...

Now I will go carve on that bench you wrote
about....

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14 posted 2003-09-18 10:28 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Oh Martie, sometimes the summer fading into the autumn saddens me a bit too, mostly because I love hearing the children laugh and squeal and giggle and you just don't hear that during the school year that much! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is most beautiful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

Goodknight
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15 posted 2003-09-29 07:27 PM


Martie - how wonderfully you write - your words touch me so deeply - Paul
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