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Slowly the Slipping of Summer
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Slowly the Slipping of Summer |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Slowly air moves through the open door onto the inside of my arm then begs the corner of my eye to watch as it turns a small thread of web into a gold chain even as I look away feeling like I can’t bare to know how fragile this one thing is and how carelessly it can be destroyed but I have already seen it connecting the wooden door frame to the file cabinet full of papers I see how it is set on fire with perfect sunlight as if trying to take the place of bare feet and the sound of summer’s children gone and replaced with slamming car doors and crows quarreling across these words Slowly air moves into the voices of the leaves over my shoulder I feel a goodbye it is made from the slipping of summer and I turn hoping to catch one last whispered word with listening naked eyes but there is only the sound of leaves |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Oh my, Martie...this is so beautiful, yet left me with such a feeling of sadness...and loss. Big hugs to you, my friend...love you much...  When the power of love overcomes the |
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MorninGlory Member
since 2003-08-30
Posts 175Oklahoma |
This is exquisite, absolutely beautiful. I could hear that air rustling, nice, good visual images here! Great job! ~ becky |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
with listening naked eyes =========================== which is exactly why you write with such exceptional vision...and why I seek enlightenment thru your poetic perception.  "If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ... |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
Soft and sweet and gentle and good. What a wonderful expression of what it's like inside the vision of a beautiful poet in a beautiful mood. I love this. That's all I can say about it. |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Martie - how soft and lovely this is! I love the idea of the breeze calling out to you, catching your eye! Corinne |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
"feeling like I can’t bare to know how fragile this one thing is and how carelessly it can be destroyed..." Sometimes things are stronger than they seem! *smile* Great work!!!! Thank you for sharing it. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful dear Martie...love this keeper. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Very nice Martie. This is as fine a piece as any of read. A keeper for sure. Thanks for posting it. I love the imagery you created in this. It is so sweet and lovely. Thanks! |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Slowly air moves into the voices of the leaves You write a poem in one phrase... awesome! But what a beautiful whole this is... your listening eyes gift us with treasure. |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Martie - stunning verse from your pen. 'over my shoulder I feel a goodbye it is made from the slipping of summer and I turn hoping to catch one last whispered word with listening naked eyes but there is only the sound of leaves' almost reminds me of a love lost, touched me it did... BC |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Soooooo.....lovely.... If she hasn't seen it yet [and I haven't looked], JM will love the alliteration.... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
And I will love ALL of it! You create tension without being tense, drama without being dramatic, color without making it colorful, art without artyness. Reading a poem of yours is like looking at a spun glass figurine -- I could swear it's alive, except that it's too beautiful to live. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Martie....poetic perfection. The slipping of Summer as Autumn nears. A time when the leaves silently fall to their place of rest. Thanx Dear One... Now I will go carve on that bench you wrote about.... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggsssssss) Oh Martie, sometimes the summer fading into the autumn saddens me a bit too, mostly because I love hearing the children laugh and squeal and giggle and you just don't hear that during the school year that much! (kiss on cheek) God Bless You, sweet friend, this is most beautiful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
Martie - how wonderfully you write - your words touch me so deeply - Paul |
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