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Sargasso's Maid
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Sargasso's Maid |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Early the sea swept Sand with ragged broom Leaving this bit of shell That strand of kelp To mar pristine As if she the char woman Had hurried in her chore Perhaps thinking of that man Waiting somewhere for her charms But the footprints were gone And mine seemed profane Yet I marched on as if it mattered not I was intruding on this place Coveted by the tide Yet clinging to the lost lover land Two days before We had shared this strand With white skinned exposures From far too young for skin That tempted burn And stare from wicked older eyes Who remembered with covered sigh The youthful days Of baseball terms Describing indiscretions There were the waves To reflect sunlight into my own eyes Blinding me For the moment happy Content Later she returned That cleaning woman who reclaimed The marred To sweep it again As moonlight staggered across crests and cloud I saw the swell of her Take woman’s form liquid With a motion that made me ache For a simple touch of hand Or understanding of lips To brush my own “The lady dances on wind and piles high the clouds to veil naked the hearts of men.” She still holds some part of me Captive to the sea |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Captive, indeed. Spellbound, as well. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
When I read anything you have written.. I never....ever...want it to end. This piece is no exception. I feel as though I have been lifted up and carried away... Thank you for this Captain.
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But the footprints were gone And mine seemed profane Yet I marched on as if it mattered not I was intruding on this place Coveted by the tide Yet clinging to the lost lover land Two days before We had shared this strand With white skinned exposures From far too young for skin That tempted burn And stare from wicked older eyes Who remembered with covered sigh The youthful days Of baseball terms Describing indiscretions ========================== As moonlight staggered across crests and cloud I saw the swell of her Take woman’s form liquid With a motion that made me ache For a simple touch of hand Or understanding of lips To brush my own “The lady dances on wind and piles high the clouds to veil naked the hearts of men.” She still holds some part of me Captive to the sea ================================ oh my god .............. ........................ ........................ ........................ all morning Ive watched the reports with a heavy heart, knowing "she" will be reclaiming sacred beaches and washing away my footprints...lacking words to explain how it hurts to think of these exquisite shores, where I knew contentment like no other time in my life, could be taken...and then you post this ... (thank you)  "If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I didn't want this to end... willing captive to your words. Excellent! |
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Trillium
since 2001-03-09
Posts 12098Idaho, USA |
This is a wonderful write! I enjoyed reading it so much and it brought the sea and the sand right to my door. Betty Lou Hebert |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
forgive me Ron...but I needed to read this one again... Mark just called me from Chesapeake Bay... this beautiful beach was the first place he took me this time last year,--the place that has been my muse of tides-- this is where I saw my first ocean sunrise...where the butterflies were on the beach...where I touched blue and finally knew its reasons....is already underwater... my mothy heart hurts.    "If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ... |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A most magical write, Ron. You continue to blossom as a poet! Corinne |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Certainly no man can write of the sea as well unless they have the sea imprinted in their minds and salt flowing effortlessly through veins that feed the brine... |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"She still holds some part of me Captive to the sea" You do know how much I love the water, right? Captive... Susan |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This cast a spell on me.  Crystal |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
But the footprints were gone And mine seemed profane Yet I marched on as if it mattered not I was intruding on this place Coveted by the tide Yet clinging to the lost lover land Two days before We had shared this strand With white skinned exposures From far too young for skin =========================== sometimes I swear you can read me mothy mind... lord knows time after time you write me mothy heart. (thank you for that)  (forgive me for "hijacking" your thread yesterday) "If you see lonely, clear skies turning stormy ... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
BEautiful write my friend. |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Bravo! This is my favorite poem of the day. Excellent write Cpat. I am really glad you postedf this one. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
But the footprints were gone She still holds some part of me Captive to the sea'' Captive to the sea.... such a piece of art...hugssss you Lauren~ The way you move me |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Captivating, captain!   EA |
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