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shannon harter
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0 posted 2003-09-16 06:36 PM



         "The Good, The Bad, The Ugly"


   fresh and clean, blue eyed and blonde,
all it took was one look,my heart was gone.

he bought me roses,
he took me out,
he called me sweetie,
and thought i was cute when i'd pout.

-the good

i didnt need friends,is what he claimed,
if another guy looked then i was to blame.

walking down the streets, he would shield my eyes,
couldnt have me look at any male walking by.

-the bad

another slap in the face,for talking back,another pinch on the leg, i was never cut any slack.

a hospital stay for having my arm ripped outta place,a lie to the doctors,"i fell down the staircase"

-the ugly

a little visit from courage, and a lot of anger at him, made me walk away,never to look back again.

-the good

somethings wrong with my body,somethings moving inside, i ran away far, from him i needed to hide.

-the bad

my back hurts so bad,my stomach feels strange,
this cannot happen now, not at this early of stage.

the blood is astounding, the grief, greater still.
i know your supposed to feel forgivness in your heart, but for him, i never will.

-the ugly

© Copyright 2003 shannon harter - All Rights Reserved
gringakiwi
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1 posted 2003-09-16 06:41 PM


This was very sad indeed, a very moving piece shannon!

Earth Angel
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2 posted 2003-09-16 06:45 PM


---and keep on walking! My goodness, if this is about you, you've been to hades and back--a few too many times!!!

You did a fine job with this emotive write. I liked how you laid it out--that was very effective!

Healing hugs,
EA

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3 posted 2003-09-16 07:37 PM



The title drew me in...
the story/poem drew my sorrow...

if this is your life
my prayers are with you...

if this was your imagination,
you have a gift at drawing on
real life.

Susan Caldwell
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4 posted 2003-09-16 08:26 PM




You know I loved the way you wrote this...


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5 posted 2003-09-16 09:32 PM


To be able to write about it like this (if it was from a personal experience)proves you are very very strong, and resilient.
A very strong and powerful write, Shannon.

Susan Caldwell
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6 posted 2003-09-17 08:55 AM


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7 posted 2003-09-17 08:59 AM


wow this is sad and if it is about you hope your ok now

If your afraid of the dark, then why did you come?

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8 posted 2003-09-17 09:27 AM


the journey through such pain and through such growth.. recorded well in your piece.. take courage...

to write about it... even more and an understanding that all life is not the way we are sometimes led to believe..

nicely done


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9 posted 2003-09-17 01:59 PM




(big hugggssssssss) Oh Shannon, my heart goes out to you, dearest friend, I understand your tears and though you didn't deserve any of this inner-hell, you writing these powerful sentiments only proves how strong and compassionate you are! (sigh) We all send angel healing hugs your way, sweet friend, you have many friends who love you and feel for you like me and many here, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Shannon, than you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

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