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Wind
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0 posted 2003-09-15 05:25 PM



losing grip
more and more each day,
I strike matches
and play with fire

Every doorknob
becoming a trap
don’t turn on the lights
when the basement’s flooded

you might be shocked…

I sense some disturbance here

you should choke
you shouldn’t breathe
so easily

too much silence
not enough rain

if eyes are the windows to my soul
then
NO
ONE’S
HOME.

Poor puppy.

I should pity
but instead
pull the chain tighter

oh you’re in trouble now…

it’s not me-
it’s you
I swear…

stupid
you can’t see what you’ve done
I need to call the damage control
or hurricane patrol
before I do something insane

this storm
identical
to every one
before it

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

© Copyright 2003 Liz - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2003-09-15 05:33 PM


(chuckling) this storm... like all the ones before it only a template that is used before the colors are added... some colors are darker than others..


you do write beyond your years.. Ms Chopped liver... oh..no your not chopped liver...
your lemon cream pie...

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2 posted 2003-09-15 05:42 PM


lemons? where?

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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3 posted 2003-09-15 06:32 PM


You're not nuts! You're poppin' corny! lol  

You really do need to get some more sunshine, Dear One! Mind you, these doldrums do make for some interesting poetry.


EA


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4 posted 2003-09-15 07:10 PM



You need to let Duncan out of your room...
so he can get back to writing.

I wondered where he ended up...

~*~

Very intense, Liz.  If I didn't know you'd come back with a off-the-shoulder reply, coming from anyone else, I would be sincerely concerned.

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5 posted 2003-09-15 07:16 PM


Liz...you are a wonder!!
You make me smile..laugh and wonder!
Good stuff here gal.
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~


~ I love your glances meeting mine
     across forever or the room ~

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6 posted 2003-09-15 07:31 PM


lol..I said 'poor puppy' not 'porch puppy'
ah...I needed that

EA...nah..I get enough sunshine right here just kidding sunny


And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

[This message has been edited by Wind (09-15-2003 07:47 PM).]

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7 posted 2003-09-15 08:13 PM


Wind my dear, you are the eye of the storm and don't even know it!! Awesome. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
            Emily Dickinson




    

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8 posted 2003-09-15 08:15 PM


but the eye doesn't have any wind. isn't that ironic? thanks Nightshade

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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9 posted 2003-09-15 08:34 PM


you so crazeh that's why we larvae u
Wind
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10 posted 2003-09-15 08:37 PM


sure...gotta lava tha way ya spell boy

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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11 posted 2003-09-15 09:23 PM


Liz..what can I say..I read you always..and wonder where that big voice comes from..

hugs
M

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12 posted 2003-09-15 11:11 PM




(sigh) How do you even know if the storm is taking precedent down in that basement, for if you are the eye of the storm here most certainly are greater banshees outside! (big hugggssssssss) This is so clever, sweet friend, love that personification, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Liz, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth
I can see the sun set and I perceive

***Live***

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (09-15-2003 11:12 PM).]

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13 posted 2003-09-15 11:24 PM


Hey, make sure all that water doesn't put the fire out!  

I love your fire!

Susan

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14 posted 2003-09-15 11:28 PM



Okay...gotta admit...I thought of Duncan too,
when I read 'poor puppy'...LOL.  
Enjoyed this, Liz.

Hugs,
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

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15 posted 2003-09-16 04:29 PM


I happen to be very good to pourch puppy. lol..you can even ask him

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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16 posted 2003-09-16 04:42 PM


You owe me a new basement now.
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17 posted 2003-09-16 04:55 PM


Hey Hurricane Liz  

I larvae U too!!!
I wish that I could look inside your mind....
I'll bet whatever it is that controls the thought
process works 90 miles a minute in there. LOL

You are amazing, little friend....and I really
do loooooooovveeee it!!!!


Ethel

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18 posted 2003-09-16 05:14 PM


dayuuuhm.
did i sound american then? say yes. i did in me head.

you are on fire! or not, youre wind, but, keep em coming.

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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19 posted 2003-09-16 05:20 PM


aren't you guys a riot.

lol...I talk like I am british all the time. heeee...

were ya tring to say damn? we say in like this: dam. lol

anit THAT hard gem

no i don't do basements
i larve u all

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

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