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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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If Ever If ever I had faced a night Dark and gloomy inked in spite Then this was such an evening’s fare And one for which I did not care. Lurking, waiting held in store Behind a weakened mental door Forced its way between the bars Between the white and livid scars It overwhelmed my mind and think And drove me near unto the brink It cast a net so close of weave It was beyond my own believe It dragged me down into the wave Beyond the helping hand of save A loathsome feeling I confess Till all became a nothingness It brewed a deadly dream of steep And there I died within my sleep |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
It brewed a deadly dream of steep And there I died within my sleep nicely penned,, Sad ending,,,  [This message has been edited by QjQ (09-15-2003 07:47 AM).] |
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Mystic One Member
since 2003-09-14
Posts 134 |
Yes Nice |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
QjQ I didn't, LOL thank you. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Good morning Si, how are you today? It overwhelmed my mind and think And drove me near unto the brink It cast a net so close of weave It was beyond my own believe OK, listen, I'm going to send you a life preserver, grab on and never let go....we'll all tug and pull and bring you back home.... Smiles, hugs and love to you and yours. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I didn't either...  Now go do some "waking up from slumber" poetry, sweet Sy...  |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
LoL Seymour,, I'm about half asleep here this morning,, I ment sad ending,, sorry!!! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Mystic One Glad you enjoyed the read. LeeJ I'll take your life preserver next time I sleep. LOL Nan You know I would never leave you.  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
QjQ I was just trying to be funny. LOL But thanks. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Sombre thoughts on this Monday morning Sy... believe in what your heart feels... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Well now Sy...sound like you need a good hot cup of black currant tea this morn! And then maybe a hug? ~Morning hugs and tea, Nancy~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I've had a few nightmares myself recently, Sy... and they're not at all enjoyable! Wake up man! Smell the tea! |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
...too much caffeine before bedtime, Seymour? I had an awful night, too, and I'm glad we're both still here! ~K~ |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Kahlil Me too, Sunshine It was fun to write. Nancy, You're right I'll take the tea and hug. scorpio You're right, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Rising early to tell of a night sweat... a bad dream is thankfully only that. Well done Sy. TD |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ThisDiamond Thank you for the read and well done. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I am soooo sorry, Mr. T.! There were so many demands for my help all around the world, that I wasn't able to protect you in your night of need!  I will not leave your side tonight!--and I shall bring you a lovely piece of pink calcite to prevent you from having nightmares when I am not able to be with you! Sweet dreams! EA P.S. This was an excellent sonnet!!!!!!--however, I must say it was somewhat disconcerting! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
When ever Randy has chips and beer before bed, Poor Sy will have dreams of fear and dread Randy needs to drink raspberry tea instead so Sy will have visions of butterflies in his head. Your rhyme scheme dreams are laced with imaginations thread they are the peanut butter on Randy's poetic bread.  "Between the white and livid scars" (could that line be any cooler??) "If you hear teardrops falling like rain on the rooftops ... |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
how sad... this was like a beautifully written sad song though...great job "Vision without action is a daydream. Action without vision is a nightmare." -Japanese Proverb |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Earth Angel Didn't mean to disconsert you, I'll behave. vandana Thank you dear. JM, Where have you been? Missed you. WWRS Kristie, Thank you for the read and nice comment. |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This was dark and strong.Next time just even think of my name and spirit will reach in and take hold and together we'll fly on my angelic wings to the safety of the dawn. Crystal |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
It dragged me down into the wave Beyond the helping hand of save A loathsome feeling I confess Till all became a nothingness Oooohhhh, Seymour, sounds like a scary one. I've had some of them myself. Now, those dreams are the ones it's always good to wake up from!! Right? LOL  Hugs, my friend  Ethel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ethel, Right, LOL Crystal, I'll do that, thank you.[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (09-15-2003 01:14 PM).] |
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