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The chaos effect
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The chaos effect |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981
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Whining in helium falsetto where are you girl? I'm coming to get you you should not be out in the streets this late or this early... the winds grow stronger here tonight, children hold their mother’s hands you’ll hate her one day, even for only five seconds but it’s still there instinct I have every reason to shudder and shiver I see the flagpole, yesterday it was halfway strung and chains rattling I know where you live I know where you sleep personification, you want me to give life to the storm? I wonder if lightning were to strike the metal shaft would it strike me too? I think it might be too late it's so ironic that I could die tomorrow then come home to my family and say "the bad news is I died today… The good news? now I'm a hero" pity for the chaos effect- sorry America, guess I’m not much of a patriot. And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!" -Tool [This message has been edited by Wind (09-13-2003 10:51 PM).] |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
As you so often do...you have struck me with a courage that far outshines your years... Felt the sway in the flag as it rippled the winds of uncertainty. Always be true to yourself. TD |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
very profound |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
No one would mistake you for a conformist. lol You march to the beat of your own drum--and the music is loud and clear!  Lovin' hugs, EA |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Liz, oooh an old soul you are . . . this is just amazing it's so ironic that I could die tomorrow then come home to my family and say "the bad news is I died today… The good news? now I'm a hero" I adore your writing and yes, you certainly march to your own beat a good thing xxoo |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"you’ll hate her one day, even for only five seconds but it’s still there instinct I have every reason to shudder and shiver I see the flagpole, yesterday it was halfway strung and chains rattling I know where you live I know where you sleep personification, you want me to give life to the storm?" If I grow up, can I write like you?  Amazing. Had to shake my head at this one kiddo. Your thoughts both intrigue and inspire me. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Liz...you are amazing! Very deep and profound write. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Bumping this... liz, yer muse is on top form lately. I have every reason to shudder and shiver I see the flagpole, yesterday it was halfway strung and chains rattling I know where you live I know where you sleep personification, you want me to give life to the storm? Just love these lines. you scared me whilst i read, i could hear the chains. As for supporting ones country? I support only my own world in my head..it's madness out there!!! Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Wind You just blew me away.  |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
Excellent piece Wind. I love the imagery you put down before my eyes. I wish I had half your talent. Keep them coming...I enjoy reading them ever so much. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
blind patriotism..is like blind religion... leads to fantics, who are close minded to the chance that there is more to being said and extolled than you would be had to believe... |
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