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Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

0 posted 2003-09-13 03:35 PM


sing me sleep
beneath a black star sky
the burn
is much too much
a million reasons
make a
finger itchy
though only
one
would let it go

across the rocks
I paint an ocean red
feathers spiral
in the wind

  again

i've never learned
the work of wings
in the gravity
of this
a million things
to spread
me thin
though only
one
could bridge the yawn


[This message has been edited by Aenimal (09-13-2003 03:52 PM).]

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Midnitesun
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Gaia
1 posted 2003-09-13 03:39 PM


1 is the loneliest number


OK, so it's not an original reply

but hey, my brain has been awake for over five hours already today!

Kaoru
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where the wild flowers grow
2 posted 2003-09-13 04:06 PM


Raffie..
this is so dreamy..
*swoon*

I wish I could sleep.

passing shadows
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displaced
3 posted 2003-09-13 04:37 PM


cool
icebox
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in the shadows
4 posted 2003-09-13 04:39 PM


Alas,
poor Icarus!

I knew him, Horatio.


Wind
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5 posted 2003-09-13 06:46 PM


lots of good words in this one... and pretty colors. yes...the colors

1 is better than none.

lol...and 6-5=3...or what was it? 2+2=5?

I should shut up and umm...but this is good and i won't try mathematics..anymore..

And the angel said unto me, "These are the cries of the carrots, the cries of the carrots!"
-Tool

littlewing
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New York
6 posted 2003-09-13 06:55 PM


felt the feathers brush my face Raph

freefall gasp a grasp
of feather
wooly cotton comfort
upon those rocks
within the dark
a spark?
or the moon
watching, waning, waxing
she does not lie, no
residing within the insanity
calamity
disturbing reality
of one
brevity of life  

(I have No clue where that came from)
This is one beautiful write Raph
*smiling*
xxoo

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7 posted 2003-09-14 12:38 PM


Always the unexpected, the thing nobody else thought of....excellent stuff!

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Local Rebel
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Southern Abstentia
8 posted 2003-09-14 04:56 PM


only one can

at least maybe at a time


1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace
9 posted 2003-09-15 06:59 AM


do you know how talented you are?...i feel your words like rain softly against dry earth and snuggling between the cracks...h
Cpat Hair
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10 posted 2003-09-15 10:12 AM


i've never learned
the work of wings
in the gravity
of this
a million things
to spread
me thin
though only
one
could bridge the yawn

very cool... enjoyed!

vandana
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11 posted 2003-09-15 10:13 AM


loved it one of your best
gemjop
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12 posted 2003-09-15 12:27 PM


You are the most annoying man aliiiiive!

you give us this, then disappear? where are you idiot?
STOP IT!!!!



I'm getting abusive, I'm dangerous, I haven't eaten for two days!!!!!!!!!!!!!

Instant karma's gonna get you.

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