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Weathered Weave - (screen wire challenge)
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Weathered Weave - (screen wire challenge) |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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Weathered Weave Though often touched, unnoticed I remain While here I stand, my mission to protect A simple wooden frame holds me erect While keeping watch o'er those in my domain Some comers grace me with a gentle hand In visit of a loved one or a friend While others handle with a rough intend And slam me with a lack of understand The people come and go but never see They look right through as if I wasn't there And though I shield them from the harsh of glare They take for granted my transparency Diaphanous, I stand in weathered weave With mesh a'rust by raindrops of my grieve ~Vicky L. Raynes When the power of love overcomes the love of power the world will know peace. -Jimi Hendrix [This message has been edited by vlraynes (09-13-2003 02:05 PM).] |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky...this is fabulous...and made me smile..you are good at that, ya know? Maybe you could teach me how to write a sonnet?  |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Wonderful images of a screen door, how I remember the way mine used to keep out insects until one day in anger I ripped it out and was sorry for weeks. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Vicky, I really like this. This part made me feel sorry for the screen door..... The people come and go but never see They look right through as if I wasn't there And though I shield them from the harsh of glare They take for granted my transparency People are treated almost like this sometimes...like look right through as though not there. Very good writing, lady  Hugs Ethel |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
But standing still, now and always. An excellent blend of form and substance. Publish this somewhere -- it wants paper and many turns of a printing press. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
Challenge well met, a unique a wonderful write. Jason |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
touching and sad....like it a lot |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
very good penning vicky,, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Who knew that a gaggle of poetic pipsters would be writing so... wonderfully of screens? Who would'a thunk? |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Vicky, m'dear sister get outta my head! (oh wait I let you in there didnt I?) hehe This is astounding! Beautiful form, beautiful writing (as they all are) And though I shield them from the harsh of glare They take for granted my transparency YES I know challenge well met xxoo |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Vicky~ You run the challenge to the limit~ Nicely done~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
BRAVO!!!! Dang, am I ever glad I didn't miss this one. Into the library you go, screens and all. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Diaphanous, I stand in weathered weave With mesh a'rust by raindrops of my grieve Bravo!!! Well met indeed! and in form..lol..structure always did fascinate me..and yet my natural aversion to being constrained keeps me from writing it.. you do it well... |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Too often do I think people look a combination of both too near-sighted through the glass or far-sighted upon the streets, failing to pick up the real indicators upon peoples faces and the sympathy they need! (sad sigh) If our perspectives can be exchanged, the world will have so much more comfortable balance, God Bless You, this is an excellent challenge, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Vicky, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I see right through this one, Vicky... And I like what I see...  |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
Sounds like some people too.. Those that seek to protect and house are often the ones who get slammed and seldom touched gently... much enjoyed this read  hugs, g "Now would you mind if I bared my soul / If I came right out and said you're beautiful..." B. Adams |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
 glad this came over the wire to my screen  |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Too too cool  Life isn't really all that bad... just don't take it too seriously |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Excellent work..this challenge was met by you wonderfully. |
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