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Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

0 posted 2003-09-12 01:11 PM

Tusk of ivory
reflect
shine white
trusted you..

I'm a fool..
those pearly
teeth
were grinning.

You
have won.

I
am not
real..
I
do not
feel.

You
were right,
but I
pricked my finger
and

I bled
I bled..

this time,
not for you.

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2003-09-12 01:15 PM

I
am not
real..
I
do not
feel.

liar liar pants on fire!!!!!!

you show you are both alive and feel.. with every word you write...

wonderful piece... I enjoyed

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2003-09-12 01:24 PM

A unique presentation, captivating.
Great write. TD

JilGirl
Member

since 2003-05-24

Posts 364
Washington

3 posted 2003-09-12 02:09 PM

If you're not real, you write
mighty fine poetry for an
inanimate object!

Praises to the real you!

'Tiz feathers that make the bird -
Always remember to keep them fluffed
but, never, EVER ruffle them!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

4 posted 2003-09-12 02:10 PM

...Sorry, Meghan...it's a beautiful piece, and I try, really, really hard, to write a thoughtful comment when I see something like this...and then I tripped over Cpat's comment and burst out laughing. What ARE they putting in his burritos?

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

5 posted 2003-09-12 03:30 PM

I love your writing!

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

6 posted 2003-09-12 03:34 PM

Oh, you are very real indeed! I love your intensity...everything you write seems so charged that one spark would explode it like a pipe bomb.

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LngJhnAg
Member Elite

since 1999-07-23

Posts 3508
Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion

7 posted 2003-09-12 03:35 PM

Deep - That first verse threw me (and still does). The rest of the verse made me regret the many times I "smiled." Nicely done.

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

8 posted 2003-09-12 04:01 PM

you rock...

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

9 posted 2003-09-12 04:27 PM

I
am not
real..
I
do not
feel.

You
were right,
but I
pricked my finger
and

I bled
I bled..

Meghan, it's odd how some people think
no-one hurts in this world but themselves,
isn't it? I love your writing, sweetie,
because you are so real!!
Hugs to you

Ethel

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

10 posted 2003-09-13 03:24 AM

Oh yes...you are real and you feel
and yes...you bleed upon the page.
Beautifully expressed, Meghan.

Hugs,
~Vicky
When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

11 posted 2003-09-13 04:27 AM

sadly beautifully you

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

12 posted 2003-09-13 08:48 AM

Ohh Meg, you do write with such grace

You
were right,
but I
pricked my finger
and

I bled
I bled..

this time,
not for you.

mannn . . . this is the punch lady
you got it . . .
Beautiful writing . . .
bittersweet in nature
*smile*
xxoo

[This message has been edited by littlewing (09-13-2003 08:52 AM).]

Ericc
Member Elite

since 2003-01-31

Posts 4178

13 posted 2003-09-13 10:36 AM

Wow...so deeply dark and beautiful.

Eric

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