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Ratleader
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0 posted 2003-09-11 09:02 PM



Being Wind

Whenever the wind comes along,
the curls of dust
rise up and cheer like fans
on a big play

You can feel the truth in it
but truth like wind
is an occasional thing
that we only notice
when it kicks sand in our faces

If we knew wind
knew truth
it's a predetermined thing,
high to   low
with a coreolis curve
and all the momentum of air

We make our own wind by moving
choosing where   why
taking the curves and
changing our direction
regardless of the world's push
of low, of high or spin

and in the mirror
we watch dust
stand up behind as
we become the wind

© Copyright 2003 Ed Ratledge - All Rights Reserved
nakdthoughts
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1 posted 2003-09-11 09:24 PM


You can feel the truth in it
but truth like wind
is an occasional thing
that we only notice
when it kicks sand in our faces

what a terrific verse, Ed...
I like it standing alone

M

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2 posted 2003-09-11 09:29 PM


"and in the mirror
we watch dust
stand up behind as
we become the wind"

~ powerful conclusion!


EA


froggy
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3 posted 2003-09-11 10:10 PM


Hey Ratleader

I really like this one.

:-)

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4 posted 2003-09-11 10:14 PM


We make our own wind by moving
choosing where   why
taking the curves and
changing our direction
regardless of the world's push
of low, of high or spin
***************************************

yep, and especially after a full four course meal


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5 posted 2003-09-12 12:09 PM


You can feel the truth in it
but truth like wind
is an occasional thing
that we only notice
when it kicks sand in our faces

You've created a magnificent tapestry of wisdom woven with beauty... finished with finest craftsmanship in those final lines. Excellent work, my friend... I like this breeze.

passing shadows
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6 posted 2003-09-12 01:19 AM


very cool Ed

an awesome piece! and i love the ending!

vlraynes
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7 posted 2003-09-12 01:23 AM



This is beautiful, Ed.  I truly enjoyed it.
Hugs,
~Vicky

When the power of love overcomes the
love of power the world will know peace.
-Jimi Hendrix

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8 posted 2003-09-12 01:32 AM


I liked your poem, reminds me of rideing my bike and being the wind.
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