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Ratleader

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0 posted 2003-09-10 01:24 AM

Slam the window,
shut out the moon:
it's saying things
I don't want to hear,
calling things I can't allow

I can't bear the round of it,
the swelling yellow light,
that welling of gravitic grace,
the feel of soultide pulled
out of the depths I must deny

There can't be stillness
with the moon around;
the heart will move,
the lilting moonsong betray
down to a darkening tumble of pain

It's out there anyway, I know,
but tonight I can pretend,
block out the worst of it,
and for one sweet tearless night
think no thought of the moon, or you

icebox
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1 posted 2003-09-10 01:31 AM

This is excellent, but not even great poetry can deny the Moon.

I am sorry my friend. I wish you peace.

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2003-09-10 01:38 AM

It's out there anyway, I know,
but tonight I can pretend,

One of those nights is it???

I'm not blocking it out just yet...
but I might change my mind in the morning,
that doesn't mean I don't respect you... as the wonderful poet that you are!

You're going good and deep Mr. Rat~

Ratleader

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3 posted 2003-09-10 02:00 AM

I've got a couple things hurtin' on me these days, but when it gets right down to it, most of my hurting lately is for other folks I care about. I'm a lucky guy if I look at it straight-on (yeah, like I can do that....).

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Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

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4 posted 2003-09-10 03:45 AM

shut out the moon:
it's saying things
I don't want to hear,

yup sometimes it's speaks to me too, know this feeling m'friend.

M

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

vlraynes
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Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2003-09-10 03:49 AM

A different perspective here...but I like it.
Well expressed emotions, Ed.
Peace and Hugs,
~Vicky
If you judge people, you have no time to love them.
--Mother Teresa

suthern

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since 1999-07-29

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6 posted 2003-09-10 08:26 AM

Sometimes, the more we try NOT to think of someone, the more they're on our mind... entering our thoughts with the rhythm of our breaths. Anguish only comes from depth of caring... someone is fortunate to have you... however hard you try to deny the moon. Excellent work, my friend.

littlewing
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since 2003-03-02

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New York

7 posted 2003-09-10 08:31 AM

ahh Ed, she mocks me often , as well
although I do bask in beauty quite often
(self-torture)
Beautiful writing
xxoo

Martie

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8 posted 2003-09-10 10:31 AM

Ed...If it could be that easy to lock your heart, by just closing the window, you would be rich from teaching others how. I hear it loud and clear in this poem, even in the morning clouds with no moon.

wranx
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9 posted 2003-09-10 10:34 AM

And harder still, when she is, as she is now... plumped and fecund

Good write Ed

Ed

garysgirl

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10 posted 2003-09-10 10:41 AM

But, Ed, the moon has so many stories, we can't shut
her out. Look at the good sides of the moon?

Do you need a hug?

Ethel

Marge Tindal

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11 posted 2003-09-10 10:50 AM

Ed~

'tonight I can pretend'

Oh, how I know that phase of life~

A superb write my friend~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
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Sunshine

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12 posted 2003-09-10 11:05 AM

Well done, Ed. What I liked best about this,
is that if you had left your name off, it could have been perceived to have been written by a man, or a woman...

and that's about as universal as it gets.

You know I enjoyed this one. Thank you.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (09-10-2003 11:06 AM).]

Janet Marie
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13 posted 2003-09-10 11:05 AM

There can't be stillness
with the moon around;
the heart will move,
the lilting moonsong betray
down to a darkening tumble of pain
============================
ya had me from the title on...
love the personifi and imagery of this

The moon got me last night...
twas an orange gowned beauty as she rose
mind if i keep this one in me mothy library?

"When your own emptiness is all thats gettin thru
there comes a point when youre not sure why youre still talking
I passed that point long ago"

Aenimal
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the ass-end of space

14 posted 2003-09-10 06:01 PM

As usual amazing writing Ed

vandana

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15 posted 2003-09-10 07:25 PM

enjoyed

Susan Caldwell
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16 posted 2003-09-10 08:52 PM

I have always been attracted to the moon and water...nothing better than sitting on the beach at night with a full moon...It is where I am supposed to be..

Don't shut it out...let it bathe you.

Susan

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