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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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I've climbed the highest mountain and stood in the meadowmist while it rained down on me camouflaging the clearing, mistaking reality. A phase of lavender fields swaying in the wind believing I could, for a minute. I have drifted over a pond floating like a water lily and felt you in the swirling beside me. Your hair fanning out like an underwater flame catching my breath laid down on the edge of my dreams. Training my eyes to the light seeing how far I had come to the top of rise and how far down I might fall. But the view that I'm seeing from the top of the clouds all powdered blue in the chill Thrills me~ |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
This is wonderful! Thank you for sharing it. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Beautiful -- just beautiful. This one is going straight to my library! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thanks to you two gentle men for your nice comments! You shouldn't have, but I'm so glad you did. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
very nicely done Bluesy... the imagery well captured and the idea..well presented.. very nice work. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ahahah Bluesy . . . I adore the ending beautiful! and let it be, please tweets xxoo |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Well golly gee, thanks Cpat, I appreciate it very much. I'm so glad you did, thank you tweets~ |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
What a finish here my dear! The last line, so perfectly completed the momentary trembles when we look down... Wonderful. TD |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Hi Blues, and I am captivated by this one, especially the fantastic ending!!! Sometimes we have to forget about the falling, and just enjoy the view!!!! ~S~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Your hair fanning out like an underwater flame" ~ I swear, I will never be able to look at hair fanning out in water like that without thinking of this line.  You have such a beautiful and unique way of seeing things--and feeling them!  Linda |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lori From the way I've seen you fly...I think your landing will be true. This is beauiful poetry! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (smiles) Oh Lori, this is precious, sweet friend, I too just love the wonderful animation and imagery you put into this, made me imagine you rising from the ocean and feeling the sky oscillating! (kiss on cheek) I love this, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
A great write, you know I loved this! Jason |
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SPUD Junior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 12 |
This is very pretty. I enjoyed the imagery. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
terrific write,, |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Kathleeen~ Thank you for reading my dear~ It means a lot. Sunnyone~ Isn't that the truth, thanks for your knowing reply. Hiya Earthy Mama~ I'm glad you could picture it, and I thank you for your nice compliments. Martie~ You mean to say you think I'll land on my own two feet afterall? Thanks for the vote of confidence, I might just surprise everybody one day. Hugs~ Noah~ I love the way you see things, thank you for sharing that image with me. Well if I didn't, I do now, thank you Jason~ Hi SPUD~ Thank you kindly and welcome to Passions. QJ~  I appreciate that.Thank you sweet vandana~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Bluesy~ I loved this, so cool and cleansing.. Beautiful.. Susan |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
love this pretty lady....I almost felt as though I was falling ever so softly.....hugssss you Lauren~ The way you move me |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Susan~ Thank you. It does feel that way, cool and cleansing when one learns to breathe easier. (with a little help from my friend) Lauren~ I'm glad you felt the softness as it was meant to be. After all that's what clouds are for!! (to cushion the blow) Hugs back at you~ |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Lori, I knew your fear of falling would never hold you back. Another excellent write. I always look forward to your words... If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Training my eyes to the light seeing how far I had come to the top of rise and how far down I might fall. Absolutely lovely. *S* |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
I thought ~ Exceptional imagery. Enjoyed! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Thank you for always encouraging me when I need it most, like today. hugs Larry~ Well, I'm teetering right about now, look out below! Thank you suthern gal~ Opeth~ What a nice surprise, thanks. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
beautiful Lori... hugss M |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
"I have drifted over a pond floating like a water lily and felt you in the swirling beside me. Your hair fanning out like an underwater flame catching my breath laid down on the edge of my dreams." The edge of a dream...have walked it myself. You do have a way with images Bluesy. "Underwater flame"...love that!  |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Maureen and Duncan, thank you! |
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