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Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

0 posted 2003-09-09 09:01 PM

Dana’s Notes [Konrad]

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It had been awhile
since Konrad had scribbled his last thoughts,
sensing that Leoncio
might round a corner, any time

and Konrad wanted to be there
animated, conscious, aware
because he knew,
he knew

he would have to look deeper
into that man’s eyes than he had ever looked,
even more than when he had looked into
Dana’s eyes,

if he were to know.

Even while the voices whispered sounds of father’s blood.

For the first time, Konrad could feel
the soles of his own feet
even through this old leather ~
standing his own ground
and the soul of him began
hunkering in deep.

He had waited for Dana to return,
slipping easily into the locale as if
undressing a banana, and began to
stroll the beaches, combing them for footsteps,
for the note he had left for her,
where she would check in, someday, soon, said,

Find me on the white sands.

She would know. He prayed she would know.
He only hoped
she would hurry to Cozumel.

He missed the chocolate sound of her,
while scattering the names of Jake, Iambe, and Dillon
across the sands.

From far off, he could hear the monkeys
in the trees.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (09-09-2003 09:04 PM).]

Larry C

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since 2001-09-10

Posts 10286
United States

1 posted 2003-09-09 09:17 PM

Me thinks an excellent story is in progress! I hope I get to catch up on all of it. Hey you, you're as good as ever and I like that a lot.

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

2 posted 2003-09-09 09:21 PM

Wooohooo!! Here comes another adventure! Love it! hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
Emily Dickinson

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2003-09-10 11:27 AM

because he knew,
he knew

he would have to look deeper
into that man’s eyes than he had ever looked,
even more than when he had looked into
Dana’s eyes,

if he were to know.

Even while the voices whispered sounds of father’s blood.

For the first time, Konrad could feel
the soles of his own feet
even through this old leather ~
standing his own ground
and the soul of him began
hunkering in deep.

He had waited for Dana to return,
slipping easily into the locale as if
undressing a banana, and began to
stroll the beaches, combing them for footsteps,
for the note he had left for her,
where she would check in, someday, soon, said,

Find me on the white sands.
=============================
ahhhh so glad to see you coming back to this...
I am SOOOOOO looking forward to all that this promises..
yes...things to come.....
me thinks the fall with be full of inspiration

"When your own emptiness is all thats gettin thru
there comes a point when youre not sure why youre still talking
I passed that point long ago"

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

4 posted 2003-09-10 01:42 PM

ah..undressing a tropical fruit in a public forum...now now now..is that proper???? lol

nicely done K... you wove the tale in an air of mysticism that continues yet feels as solid as the stone...

someday Dana will have to find Konrad..and perhaps save him from his own madness that creeps deeper into his psyche with each passing..

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

5 posted 2003-09-10 05:33 PM

I could see, feel and hear all this Karilea.

Excellent writing m'dear as usual

M

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Aenimal
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since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
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6 posted 2003-09-10 05:58 PM

fantastic karilea

vandana

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since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

7 posted 2003-09-10 07:29 PM

enjoyed

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

8 posted 2003-09-21 04:55 PM

"and Konrad wanted to be there
animated, conscious, aware
because he knew,
he knew

he would have to look deeper
into that man’s eyes than he had ever looked,
even more than when he had looked into
Dana’s eyes,

if he were to know.

Even while the voices whispered sounds of father’s blood."

LOL...the thought that keeps running through my mind (with childlike impatience), "are we there yet?". And now, off to see where the next installment leads.

teenpoet
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since 2001-10-17

Posts 280
Michigan

9 posted 2003-09-22 10:14 AM

It's a good poem. I hate to say this but the only reason I even thought to even halfway read this is because it had the name Dana in it and I'm missing a friend of mine named Dana and for some dumb reason I thought maybe you might mean my Dana...but I know that's ridiculous but I really do miss her and I'm just kinda depressed right now. But it was a poem worth reading just so you know.

Let go of your concept of reality and try mine for a while...then we'll see how long you last.

[This message has been edited by teenpoet (09-22-2003 10:15 AM).]

angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

10 posted 2003-09-22 11:38 AM

I so love your stories.

Crystal

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