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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2003-09-09 12:30 PM

It's a sweet, sharp sting,
your mouth on mine.
We're melting like fat
in a pyre.
It won't be long now.
It can't be long.
Before we go
I must relay

your hair is full of leaves,
burning up like stars.
The heat is a black hall
pounding down around us.
Will we walk together
through its inner sanctums,
hand in hand forever,
or will this be the final play?

If so, please look into my eyes
and see the way that I see you --
as you see me.
Together, darling, as we fall
below the throng of gathered sight.

Their words are whispers. Listen to them
break across the forest clearing.
From "Witch! Witch! Witch!"
to "Ich liebe dich."
A small mercy,
ours to be sure.
May they witness our final sparks.

See what I'll be up to on Saturday: www.bubastis.com/funeral

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

1 posted 2003-09-09 12:44 PM

nicely done Mike... and ended in a fashion I have come to look for from you... tightly mystical...lol... what ever that means...

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

2 posted 2003-09-09 12:47 PM

From "Witch! Witch! Witch!"
to "Ich liebe dich."

very cool!

haven't heard those words in quite a long time now

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-09-09 01:13 PM

Mikey . . .
felt like I was in a ring of trees . . .

Dark beauty, m'friend
and here:

Their words are whispers. Listen to them

I Love You . . .
what beautiful last words to hear
and this:

It's a sweet, sharp sting,
your mouth on mine.

so so bittersweet . . .
You have done it again . . .
*smiling*
xxoo

Ummm . . . no fair having THAT much fun this weekend . . . liking the Dark Angel Society

[This message has been edited by littlewing (09-09-2003 01:17 PM).]

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

4 posted 2003-09-09 01:13 PM

Oh, this was effective. 'Ich liebe dich'. Nicely done.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

vlraynes
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

5 posted 2003-09-09 02:52 PM

Oh...very cool write, Mikey...I love this.
Hugs,
~Vicky
If you judge people, you have no time to love them.
--Mother Teresa

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

6 posted 2003-09-09 03:40 PM

Very great write.
Crystal

Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

7 posted 2003-09-09 04:07 PM

Lucky both.....awesome write sir...

Lauren~

The way you move me
I walk with your shadow
With your silhouette
Leave the light on
It always comes
Back to you

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

8 posted 2003-09-09 04:27 PM

I remember now how to describe something..

You're amazing, I'm saving this.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

9 posted 2003-09-09 05:44 PM

Thanks, everyone. And Kaoru, thanks for the smile.

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (09-09-2003 05:45 PM).]

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