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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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Weighting ... depressions show the pillows worn just so the pounding and turning of the night the weighting heavily of each day feeling trampled upon the body moves bruised from thought betrayed by words that cling their fray to harvest another ... come-what-may. "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." (Will Moss) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (09-09-2003 10:44 AM).] |
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teenpoet Member
since 2001-10-17
Posts 280Michigan |
I like this. It sounds...feels...I don't know. I can't desribe it but you wrote it well. Let go of your concept of reality and try mine for a while...then we'll see how long you last. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"come-what-may" Sometimes it seems like that is all there is...  Susan |
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garysgirl  
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Maureen, this one touched me...it hurts.  Hugs to you, my friend  Ethel |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
I enjoyed this. I had to read it twice in order to understand how "weighting" fit into the poem. Enjoyed! |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
teenpoet, Susan, Ethel thank you for reading and your kind responses. Opeth...sometimes I make up words...in a way it is about "waiting" and the weight of it all....depression and the impressions made on my pillow from the thumping of it to make myself find an indentation that feels good...somehow thinking my thoughts would eventually find comfort. Thank you M |
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