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Entwined Forever
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Entwined Forever |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Reaching, finding the delicate prize, a small starfish lying among the sand. Reminding her of what was upon a night when breezes chilled the skin as words chilled the heart. Why, she asks? Why all of these days? Days of countless lonely walks, the occasional hello. The times when she knelt and drew hearts, only to see them washed away as quickly as they came. Two hearts, now one. Remembering the way he held her, his arm around her, resting perfectly upon her hip. Walking in time to each other as hips swayed and lightly touched, sending a shiver through her, even now as she imagines back to that time. Petals, He loves me....he loves me not...he... He is not there, for if he were, she would smile, giggle as he attempted to catch each petal she cast to the wind. Jogging back to her, breathless, placing a single petal upon a closed lid, kissing her there....allowing his lips to brush her cheek as he wandered lower to her waiting lips.. Something inside her said that night would be goodbye. His orders in hand, a tear in his eye, the hurried kiss as the conductor yelled “All Aboard” in a booming voice. She stood there as the giant wheels strained against the rail, a wisp of steam obscuring her sight. Trying desperately to see him, searching frantically through the misted windows. Finally, she knew where he was, for on one window, drawn on the misted glass....two hearts entwined, remaining so....even after the startling knock on the door that fateful eve, when memories walked the beach once more and a single rose floated out to sea in a bottle...for him. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Good grief, Barry...where is the hankey alert!!?? How poignant this is...like one of those movies with artistically sweet imagery and an ending that weeps for love. Wonderfully done, dear man! |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
Well, you had to know this one would bring the tears to my eyes. So beautiful...so perfect, Barry. Patricia |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh geesh Barry...I cried less tears watching the Titanic! You should have given the hankie alert!! Excellent penning poet sir.... and the ending? I'll hug ya anyway!  ~Hugs~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Barry, I am in tears. This is about as poignant and romantic and sad as a poem can get. Wow! You pulled out all the stops on this one. Great, great write my friend! Love it so much and if it's okay, I'd like to keep it. Thank you. Hugs and tears ... Marti Hear Blessings dropping their blossoms all around you. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
OK girls, tell me how to give you the Hankie alert...and I will.... Marti, be my guest....most certainly is ok by me... Nancy....thanx for the promised hug, had me worried.... Martie, thanx kid, for the thoughts and sorry for the tears without warning.... Patricia, pleased, sorry for the crying towel...I just had to do it... |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Oh my goodness, Barry, there really should have been a hanky-alert, or kleenex one!! I held it in, until I got to the last verse and then I couldn't. Goodness gracious!!  Hugs to you, my friend  Ethel |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Magnus my dear friend, this is simply beautiful. Luckily I had my hanky ready. hugs, Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Barry - you sure have written something fine. This is extrordinary, I like it a lot... Now if you would like to join me while sitting with those two ladies strumming on my guitar, come on down my friend... Or is that 'come on up'... BC |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh dear  |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
what a great penning of literary genre,, |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
smoothly told my friend...and I see the ladies enjoyed the romantic spirit of your tale... always a pleasure to read you... |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
I know how this feels, I can feel the ache with sweet surrender...I too have thrown that bottle to the waves, many times for him" hugssss Lauren~ The way you move me |
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