Open Poetry #28 |
I will smile, but I will not stay |
gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
If it were years until lazy unsuspecting stare met eyes to eyes across pavement again know this I will smile love eyes would not forget you I would let mine kiss yours in blink of remember touch your lips with hello and part . . . Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
enjoyed the write,,,
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Sensational! I just love the way you write Gemma! Hugs and Smiles, Marti Hear Blessings dropping their blossoms all around you. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
You write with such a sigh in your pen...beautiful! ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Gemma, WOW, this happened to me once when we hadn't seen each other in about 4 years, and when our eyes met, we both "startled", visibly. We were with new partners, so our eyes said hello and we kept on going. Your write really touches me, and into my library it goes! ~K~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Perfectly penned. Enjoyed. Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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MERCURY Member
since 2003-04-16
Posts 190Ireland |
Very interesting poem. |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
the eyes talk without sound,,,
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Now...I think it might have been best to just let the eyes touch... Gemma~perfectly written. Susan |
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ShannonMarie Member
since 2003-09-09
Posts 55in a state of being |
I liked it, very good |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
eyes would not forget you I would let mine kiss yours in blink of remember touch your lips with hello and part in silence..such a touch would move from your eyes..to a place in your heart.. and you would remember..a bit like remembering a breeze on bare cheek.. you wrote this well... and it aches, but not without an understanding that things pass and change..and do not destroy..just change |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
oh gemma...I know |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
gemma, gemma~ You have such a nice way with words, and always you leave me wavering between a smile and a tear. hugs sweets~ |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
I love the emotional charge this poem produced when I read it.. believe in what your heart feels... |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Gemma~ 'I would let mine kiss yours in blink of remember' Oh wow girlie ... that is soooooo precious~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This does ache but it conveys the message that things change and you move on.Nicely done. Crystal |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Oh BTW, If I said yes...I'd for sure be getting the better end of the bargain.. (chuckling) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Reminds me of something....James |
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