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Evolving Migratory Pathways Grow Fey
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Evolving Migratory Pathways Grow Fey |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Slanted The sun now slides from longer days To a longer shine somewhere else. Autumn slips From the days of hot And the sun moves south Followed in migrating flocks By those with wings But Icarus flew too close And waxed feathers in turn Melted Encouraging the fall From the grace of ideal Into a sea of knew not So I would not ask To fly on wings And trace again The need To try once again And touch the face of Sol He turns his face now To Others Somewhere perhaps that it awakens lovers skin To the sensual touch of warmth so That like lizards they bask Sun drenched in humid lives Or slightly reddened from exposure To the idea Another could be so close Could gaze on the eclipsed beauty Of their soul And still… Compare them to the moons brilliant grace Or the break of dawn on green Such lovers we once were Before the sun climbed too high And we found it far too hot To touch without being burned And then found the shade To cool… Without a cloak to wrap around Shoulders bearing scars Other wars perhaps Other dreams perhaps Still when the sun leaves summer I think of Lovers And of you. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Well, you did two things exceptionally well... for I was researching Icarus just four days ago....as a backdrop for a poem... but you did it better... and you used the word "fey"...  Thank you. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
then at least I did two thing right today... perhaps one day I'll actually learn.. lol thanks for the comment, they are always appreciated and always noted... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
the whole poem was "right"...it's just that two parts were exceptionally pleasing...  You lent the mood of Autumn a red carpet to dance in upon, soon to be strewn by the trees themselves... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron...As always you express your feelings so well using imagery that shows without actually saying. A fine talent! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Beautiful Ron..and as always... the perfect ending.... ~Soft smiles, Nancy~ ~ Summer can't be over... |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Capt. Ron, this.... Somewhere perhaps that it awakens lovers skin To the sensual touch of warmth so That like lizards they bask Sun drenched in humid lives Or slightly reddened from exposure To the idea Another could be so close Could gaze on the eclipsed beauty Of their soul And still… Compare them to the moons brilliant grace Or the break of dawn on green and this... Such lovers we once were Before the sun climbed too high And we found it far too hot To touch without being burned And then found the shade To cool… Without a cloak to wrap around Shoulders bearing scars Other wars perhaps Other dreams perhaps Still when the sun leaves summer I think of Lovers And of you. is pure poetry. I love it, Capt. Ron.  Hugs  Ethel |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Hey cap, you know i'm a sucker for anything icarus..well actually anything you write.. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Other wars perhaps Other dreams perhaps Still when the sun leaves summer I think of Lovers And of you." *sigh* Will it ever end with...."and I feel your touch and know your heart is mine" ? hmmmmm....well... sad...but oh so beautiful as only you can do. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
 What can I say, Ron? you say it all. Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Ron ~~ Fey. A fantastic word, once I looked it up as I had no sense of this word. Thank you. I'm always excited when I learn new words. As always, I love your poems and this one really drew me in and held my attention. Hugs, Marti Hear Blessings dropping their blossoms all around you. |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
So glad I found a few moments to drop in on you, Ron. A wonderful read, my friend. Patricia |
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