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icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

0 posted 2003-09-06 09:52 PM

How fabulously the cloaks
of elegance fall
in shimmering folds,
from the shoulders
and the gestures
and the manners of the tribe.

Bodies move toward bodies
knees in predatory stance,
arms and cigaretted cocktail hands
protect the loins,
wary
hungry animals
in allegorical disguise.

Smiles soften smiles,
relaxations mask the needs
to touch in curiosity,
they ask
"Can you satisfy me?"
with their eyes,
and with their tones they dance
around each other's words
in search of entry way,
each wrapped in stylish armor
of unique design.

©2003 by icebox

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

1 posted 2003-09-06 09:54 PM

enjoyed the write n read,,,

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

2 posted 2003-09-06 09:58 PM

icebox

I think this is the reason why I'm not comfortable at parties. You paint a great scene though.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2003-09-06 10:09 PM

How very 'real' this scene is...
and I have seen it played out many many times.
Very well expressed poet sir.
~Hugs~

~ Summer can't be over...
I still have sand in my shoes ~

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

4 posted 2003-09-07 03:07 AM

grins great write l@ve the way you word things

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2003-09-07 09:44 AM

Icy~

You been out clubbing?

You described it very well...

I go to watch...lol...haven't been in a while, maybe it's time...

Susan

Local Rebel
Member Ascendant

since 1999-12-21

Posts 5767
Southern Abstentia

6 posted 2003-09-07 10:47 PM

great stroke of anthropology to strophe the regulars into a tribe -- but a little stronger maybe if there was a contrasting image for the strangers, one-niters, out-of-towners et al.... like missionaries maybe? hmmm... you could have fun with that..

great stuff poet

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

7 posted 2003-09-08 12:07 PM

The message in this is clear with only the greatness you can give it.

Crystal

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