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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

0 posted 2003-09-06 02:25 AM

Enter I
the sacrifice
feet first in the metal mouth
blind
behind
a shroud denied
mechanics
of the teeth that see...

rear view mirror
cautioning
objects that appear too close
tap you on the shoulder
smile
granting you
the groin-knee'd greet.

Life behind the fold of blind--
I see color in the cloud--
suggesting pinks
of blues turned green
lions are mere mockery
Daniel was my brother once--
where is he? oh where
I see

There! The sun!
(shining on me?)
Nothing
no thing
harms me now--
I have angels in this dream.

Gavel
sounds the judge
in seek--
smack
decision
of jury
Foreman I pray
grant reprieve
tell me...
"What be done with me?"

Shall my wishes all be grant,
death I welcomed willingly--
begging now that I retract
and write a better end.

Bargaining.

A beggar's speech.

convict
crying "parity"
Ignore the distances
I see--
the spaces walled humanity--
the jury did not look at me--

I knew and etched the lines in stone.

A lifetime played
upon the stage
as I waited for review...

knowing,
opening--we closed.

[This message has been edited by serenity blaze (09-06-2003 02:44 AM).]

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

1 posted 2003-09-06 02:27 AM

fascinating images.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Kaoru

Member Elite

since 2003-06-07

Posts 3892
where the wild flowers grow

2 posted 2003-09-06 02:29 AM

I'm in awe...major awe..

Susan Caldwell
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since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

3 posted 2003-09-06 09:55 AM

Oh yes....loved this

I adore you!

Susan

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2003-09-06 10:15 AM

serenity,
Got a little lost with the force. LOL

[This message has been edited by Seymour Tabin (09-06-2003 12:18 PM).]

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

5 posted 2003-09-06 10:44 AM

ahh far from a beggars speech, My Lady K
this is eternal beauty in itself:

There! The sun!
(shining on me?)
Nothing
no thing
harms me now--
I have angels in this dream.

yes and may they always bless you
*smile*
xxoo

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2003-09-06 11:01 AM

*shaking me mothy head at you*

what you do with metaphors is mind boggeling...just in the first two verses of this alone had me going..then you play your theme of intend out to the aching end with the mastery of cryptic, haunting Poe story telling.

(you rock and it rolls me)

When was the last time you felt this high,
you are the best I've ever felt.
Its so wrong not to be with you
Its getting harder to stay away.

SH

garysgirl

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since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

7 posted 2003-09-06 11:07 AM

Oh Karen, I was going to quote some of these wonderful
lines of yours, but found I'd be quoting the whole poem.
I'm keeping this to read over and over, SereneOne.

Hugs

Ethel

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

8 posted 2003-09-06 06:25 PM

I'm in awe of you.The way you use metaphors and the way you write with so much conviction is truly amazing to see.

Crystal

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

9 posted 2003-09-06 07:45 PM

Jeeez Karen...Wow!

You're amazing totally amazing.

it's a "keeper"

and miss ya.

M

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

10 posted 2003-09-07 08:20 AM

First you take me here,
then you turn the corner
and disappear
appearing behind
in taking me there...

I think we need
to duet...

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

11 posted 2003-09-07 09:42 PM

Thanks all, for being ever generous and so patient with me.

Thanks for reading--I hope to be reading more of YOU all soon--thank you.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

12 posted 2004-06-13 02:25 PM

Doing the birthday bump from me library of rhyme divine Sen keepers.
Its your day..the forums shall be your marquee

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

13 posted 2006-04-06 12:31 PM

How I missed this ditty I have no idea, but yup, you sort of make one's jaw drop open sometimes, and this was one of them. No point in picking out a line, as they were all meant to be together

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