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Chapter 9
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Chapter 9 |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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Me and My Stupid Heart February was the last time I was in your apartment You had asked me To come over I went I never said no To you That night was the first time I fell asleep in your bed With your arm around me I had lost the battle with my heart And knew it You had mentioned that you were thinking of marriage I thought you meant That you desired To get married At some point Not to me I was sure of that But that you were Tired of being alone I was already hurting And didn’t know It was nothing Compared to what was to come |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Susan, oh this makes me stomach go queasy. I know the moment you describe. I love the simplicity of this, yet it is so complicated, it was like being there with you. keeping this. P.s, nice picture pretty lady! Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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GhostWriter_6 Member
since 2001-09-03
Posts 237??Amityville?? |
nyce content.. and i too know the feelings of this piece.... very nyce drop.... and very pretty picture too mammi..... |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
You can feel the emotion deep in this and it tugged at the pit of my stomach.I hope that this has passed and whomever this is, is shining once again.  Crystal |
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J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
You build the anticipation well |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I have been a bit remiss in responding...sorry..busy at work  Gemma~I know that feeling...well..Thank you for all of your responses  Ghostwriter_6~Thank you! Crystal~Kind of a where is she now? I will tell you after the 11th Chapter..lol..I am so mean..thank you for your continued reading!  JK~Thank you! Susan |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
I thought you meant That you desired To get married At some point Not to me I was sure of that But that you were Tired of being alone ~ This was my favorite part. It was if the words drew me in into this write, like a fly on your wall. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
At the time he spoke those words I was filled with fear... Thank you, Mike, for reading. Susan |
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