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Susan Caldwell
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0 posted 2003-09-05 09:07 AM



Me and My Stupid Heart

February was the last time
I was in your apartment
You had asked me
To come over

I went
I never said no
To you

That night was the first time
I fell asleep in your bed
With your arm around me

I had lost the battle with my heart
And knew it

You had mentioned
that you were thinking of
marriage

I thought you meant
That you desired
To get married
At some point

Not to me
I was sure of that
But that you were
Tired of being alone

I was already hurting
And didn’t know
It was nothing
Compared to what was to come


© Copyright 2003 Susan Caldwell - All Rights Reserved
gemjop
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since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587
Pencilveinia, USA
1 posted 2003-09-05 09:46 AM


Susan, oh this makes me stomach go queasy. I know the moment you describe.

I love the simplicity of this, yet it is so complicated, it was like being there with you.

keeping this. P.s, nice picture pretty lady!

Instant karma's gonna get you.

GhostWriter_6
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since 2001-09-03
Posts 237
??Amityville??
2 posted 2003-09-05 09:50 AM


nyce content.. and i too know the feelings of this piece.... very nyce drop.... and very pretty picture too mammi.....
angelblueyes
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since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148
Oklahoma
3 posted 2003-09-05 11:25 AM


You can feel the emotion deep in this and it tugged at the pit of my stomach.I hope that this has passed and whomever this is, is shining once again.
Crystal

J. K. Mitchell
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4 posted 2003-09-05 12:11 PM


You build the anticipation well
Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
5 posted 2003-09-05 12:31 PM


I have been a bit remiss in responding...sorry..busy at work

Gemma~I know that feeling...well..Thank you for all of your responses

Ghostwriter_6~Thank you!

Crystal~Kind of a where is she now?  I will tell you after the 11th Chapter..lol..I am so mean..thank you for your continued reading!

JK~Thank you!

Susan

Opeth
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The Ravines
6 posted 2003-09-09 12:21 PM


I thought you meant
That you desired
To get married
At some point

Not to me
I was sure of that
But that you were
Tired of being alone


~ This was my favorite part. It was if the words drew me in into this write, like a fly on your wall.

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
7 posted 2003-09-09 01:04 PM


At the time he spoke those words I was filled with fear...

Thank you, Mike, for reading.

Susan

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