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Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2003-09-04 07:31 AM

What season is it this morning?
Are the spring rains still falling
Or will the summer sun be burning
Do I see autumn leaves now turning
Is that chill I feel winter
And I awake yet or dreaming
Will I open my eyes to sunlight beaming
Are my words to rhyme nicely
Of fall with discord into silence.
Will the readers say oh yeah I know what you mean
Or just scratch their heads,
And will it matter
That my words sink so quickly to the bottom
To smolder for a moment
Before going cold?
Could a little change
in the general presentation
if rearranged
cause a better sensation
?
How about
A STYLE change
to move the spirit that reads to pause on each word that is
IMPORTANT! before going on.
What day is it?
And does it really matter either
As I go to the bathroom sink and splash my face with chill water
To shock me to reality
Instead of dreaming free,
To realize the stark
That even in dark
Is the comfort of my existence
This familiar residence
That I leave most every day
And return to stay
Season after season
At times beyond reason
When I might be more happy
Away from this center city,
But as I lock and bolt the door
To leave it once more
It’s not so very strange
That everything is subject to change.

Gloom

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

1 posted 2003-09-04 07:44 AM

Yep - The most consistent thing in my life is that it's subject to change... Season after season... G'morning Sir Gloom...

Professor Gloom
Member Elite

since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

2 posted 2003-09-04 07:51 AM

Thank you, Nan
for taking the time to read and respond
I hope your morning is better than mine
and you day is brighter than my

Gloom

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

3 posted 2003-09-04 07:54 AM

Professor
Good or bad change has never let me down. LOL Enjoyed the read.

QjQ
Member Elite

since 2003-04-18

Posts 3756
U.S.A.

4 posted 2003-09-04 08:09 AM

thoughts well expressed,,,

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2003-09-04 09:37 AM

Mr. GloomyOne,

I have often wondered why you don't get more responses since I think what you write is insightful, and thought provoking...that aside, I enjoyed this very much...The only thing I don't like about everything being subject to change is sometimes I just don't see it coming.....

Susan

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

6 posted 2003-09-06 10:42 AM

What season is it? everyday shows a different view

Would life be better in a different place..it would be different...and then how would I change in that.....

do I flow well with change... some would say yes... but I know better

do you write words to make people feel and ponder .... to pause... yes and quite well

very much enjoyed
Thanks

Lotus Breeze
Member

since 2003-09-06

Posts 112

7 posted 2003-09-06 05:21 PM

I know changes many,
You write many changes in lines
Confuse a little, yet I understand the thought

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