Hell below Heaven - pipTalk Forums

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Open Poetry #28

Hell below Heaven

Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2003-09-03 03:11 PM

cold air chills my skin
as i feel the caos build
with in as i set them free
amoungst me and the people of
the inocents. lives are hurt
tears are shed decapitation of the
head rolls on the grow to make a stand
we go hand and hand off to the never
land of disbeilfment as for one day
we will all truly be free from this
horrid earth to walk and talk and be loved
forever more

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....

gringakiwi
Member

since 2003-08-05

Posts 189

1 posted 2003-09-03 07:12 PM

Hello, this poem definitely has potential- it made me a little scared!! Just be careful with your spelling and grammar.

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

2 posted 2003-09-03 07:14 PM

This one was kinda dark, but could feel your power within it.Well penned.
Crystal

Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

3 posted 2003-09-03 08:19 PM

that you. and thank you for pointing out my grammical errors. i have trouble with that. especially when im in the writting mode you all know what the feels like. again thanks

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

4 posted 2003-09-03 08:45 PM

Yes, for all those that believe in his name...James

Lady Godiva
Junior Member

since 2003-09-03

Posts 35
at the bottom of your glass

5 posted 2003-09-03 08:52 PM

yes scared me abit but enjoyed!

Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

6 posted 2003-09-03 10:27 PM

Sorry hehe

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.