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1slick_lady
Member Ascendant

since 2000-12-22

Posts 6088
standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2003-09-02 09:52 PM

Was That You?

was that you
that was here as I slept
and thought touched
curving small of my back
caressing the internal
vessel of a being
as not to stir
my journey into dreams
I awoke to find
nothing here disturbed
yet an air still lingered
no, not a smell
more the fragrance
of a presence
aimlessly barefoot in vain
I searched each room and corridor
leaving me strangely comforted
by a whispery shadow
slowly opening closed doors
still no sign of you
finding nothing between the walls
till daylight beckoned me
where I found the note you left me
written in dew

"I am living a life, i have no wish to live. How did this happen?" Unknown

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

1 posted 2003-09-02 09:54 PM

warm and chilling at the same time Helen! as only you can write it! hugs, Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
Emily Dickinson

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-09-02 09:57 PM

Yes, Helen. I felt the same as Chris.....
This was romantic with a ghostly, eerie
feel to it. I really liked it.

Hugs

Ethel

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

3 posted 2003-09-02 10:25 PM

Helen . . .

ahhh like a dream, isn't it?
Beautiful one at that
you brought me there . . .
xxoo

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

4 posted 2003-09-02 10:27 PM

still no sign of you
finding nothing between the walls
till daylight beckoned me
where I found the note you left me
written in dew

kind of mysical with pretty thoughts , real nice

SharaRose
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2501
Somewhere out there~

5 posted 2003-09-02 10:58 PM

This made me think of tire tracks leaving a print in the dewy grass ...wow...always stunning!!! They just are every time I read.

Shara @-->--

Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer!

Zinsser
Senior Member

since 2001-02-27

Posts 1641
Calif.

6 posted 2003-09-03 09:16 AM

reminds me of the comforting feeling of someone who passed away letting you know they are still watching over you...
beautiful.... very well done

alisa
Member

since 2003-08-20

Posts 70
Florida

7 posted 2003-09-03 09:23 AM

this one really touched me...

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

8 posted 2003-09-03 10:11 AM

SweetSweetLady~
You took the whispery and worked it to poetic perfection~

This is pure, elegantly soft, beauty~
I'm sharing it with Pat, who sent me the lovely word-thought~
Love you~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram
[email protected]

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

9 posted 2003-09-03 10:14 AM

Ah...what did the note say???

Dreams..I just finished a very interesting book on dreams..

I enjoyed this very much.

Susan

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

10 posted 2003-09-03 10:21 AM

and the last line just sewed up the whole thing in magic. Have you been sprinkling faerie dust again?
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

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