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Lobna, The Land of Sugar
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Lobna, The Land of Sugar |
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heartpiper Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 57 |
Lobna, The Land of Sugar Reactive, reactive, and reactive I was, A compass of exaggeration drawing semicircles Only, and my wounds I cluster into a nomadic fragranced nut, A drop of oblivion falling off the throne of vulnerability, The dignified, his bearing and the haunting souls of love, languishing, Despair, The button cavity of a slashed button and the hidden "S" of the Sun, The lingering nights of the amorous The meager basin of patience And the homeless kin of no relatives, no country, The burden gauge I was, and the paper man That’s how I was, the rough script divided On papers, a nameless seabird, And a superstitious partisan. Her Right Hand The heap of thyme, Green it seeps, or spreads, or fades, I don't postulate, I surrender Myrtle or carnation, Peaches or grape vine, Fleur-de-lis or raspberry, I don’t remember How did your warmth hold onto a colour? How could a colour become redolent? Does a color sublimate? does it disperse? Condense? Does it evaporate? I don't remember How does your colour a piano of musk bathe? And your piano grows into too ripe a date, Pouring out, across my years, to reach my ache just about your fiddling finger? How could planet earth become a bracelet Laid to the east of the ring-made finger? And the sugar grows to be Lobna, And how could Iyad grow to be Caesar? Oh, I surrender Lobna... How could your voice hug my necktie? How does It sprinkle the exile golden? And your whisper vivify a land at sea? How could you Recreate me inch by inch And the script of shards grows to be marble? A river was baptized in your eyes one morning, And peace dropped in on a twain of pigeons All along your neck you shelter, And one morning was baptized a river, A stream of Wayfareres lodged round a bracelet Laid to the east of the ring-made finger. What land is this that gathers a torn man, Empowering him to unite a land ripped by an epoch of great oppression. Symbols of love, loyalty,or Poetry I don't remember,echoed: It’s Iyad's Lobna Land Lobna, The Land of Sugar. Poem was originally written in Arabic Dr. Iyad Salah "Lobna is a Middle Eastern feminine name" [This message has been edited by heartpiper (09-02-2003 03:24 AM).] |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
WOW.. WONDERFUL first post, I'm impressed! Welcome to PIP, I can't wait for more! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Dr. I am so impressed and amazed at this passionate entrance, My Goodness this is amazing . . . A river was baptized in your eyes one morning, such metaphors, astounding writing You will love it here, as we will love having you This is liquid beauty . . . Welcome to PIP! xxoo |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
beautiful, just beautiful...welcome to our passion...helen |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Dr. Iyad, welcome to Passions. Please, check your E-mail for a Special Greeting! Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? |
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heartpiper Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 57 |
Ladies and Gentlemen I feel flattered indeed Many thanx I extend from the heart for the warm welcome Kaoru: Its a pleasure and honor that you like what I have written, will be posting more soon. Littlewing: Your comment is ribbon of happiness I gladly embrace 1slick_lady: Beauty arises from your inside To all of you I take off the hat and bow Iyad |
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garysgirl 
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
A river was baptized in your eyes one morning, And peace dropped in on a twain of pigeons All along your neck you shelter, And one morning was baptized a river, A stream of Wayfareres lodged round a bracelet Laid to the east of the ring-made finger. Dr. lyad, this is a very beautiful first post. I do believe that you will like it here at Passions In Poetry. I hope so. And, welcome to our pages of blue.  Thanks for sharing Ethel....garysgirl |
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heartpiper Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 57 |
Dear Sunshine Please allow me to seed a Cedar of thanks for the special greetings deeply indebted to you Tahnx from the heart iyad |
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heartpiper Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 57 |
Dear garysgirl Very pleased you did like what I have posted. a genuine pleasure breezes my ambience. Thanx from the heart and I positive I will like it here  Iyad |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
 WELCOME TO PASSIONS! How very much I enjoyed your entrance post. I look forward to seeing more of your work. ~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Doctor~ Welcome to the land of Passions ... where sugar is found in the sweet versing from around the world~ Yours is sprinkled with beautious thoughts~ Thank you for sharing with us~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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heartpiper Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 57 |
Enchantress "Nancy" And Marge Tindal Pleased to know that you enjoyed my entrance poem, glad indeed, thanx from the heart. Sharing what I have written with souls like yours brings peace of mind and soul to me God Bless you all hugs and smilies too Iyad "Hallow the body as a temple to comeliness and sanctify the heart as a sacrifice to love; love recompenses the adorers." |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
How could your voice hug my necktie? How does It sprinkle the exile golden? And your whisper vivify a land at sea? How could you Recreate me inch by inch And the script of shards grows to be marble? It was hard for me to choose a favorite passage... this is excellent! *S* Welcome to Passions... I'm looking forward to reading more of your work! |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
I couldn't choose a favorite for I loved the whole thing.Welcome to Passion's. This was a great entrance to a wonderful world.I hope you enjoy the many varities of sugar within these pages.I know I do. Crystal |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dr Lyad Welcome to Passions....What a colorful write...so very much enjoyed! |
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Lady Godiva Junior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 35at the bottom of your glass |
my words fail me..brillant..just blew me away... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Simply amazing write. Enjoyed thoroughly. Welcome to the Passion's family. hugs to you, Chris "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
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heartpiper Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 57 |
Southern Very pleased to know that you liked what I have written. Bless You. Crystal I am positive Id enjoy it all. Thanx from the heart Martie indeed glad you liked it Lady Godiva Many thnax from the heart, very indebted indeed. Chris Thanx for the warm welcome and hugs to you too :0 Thanx to all of you Iyad "Hallow the body as a temple to comeliness and sanctify the heart as a sacrifice to love; love recompenses the adorers." |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
yes...I do enjoy these. Very nicely done... the fact it was written in Arabic first seems to influence the movement of language and the image presentation..adding an air of what to western minds would seem mystical.. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh my, Dear Dr. welcome to Pip!! And thank the higher power you came! This is brilliant and I am tapping foot in wait for the next! Susan |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I found this a fascinating read. Thank you for sharing it with us. I enjoyed the imagery and the mystic feel to the write.  Warm, welcoming hugs, Earth Angel |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
Welcome to Passions bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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gringakiwi Member
since 2003-08-05
Posts 189 |
Doctor!: How did your warmth hold onto a colour? How could a colour become redolent? Does a color sublimate? does it disperse? Condense? Does it evaporate? I don't remember  ARRRGHHH! this is my favourite bit, but all was gorgeous!! this reminds me of something. Can't wait to hear more from you, Welcome to PIP!! Connie. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) Oh Dr. Iyad, I know here you are going to sow so many springs you will be reaping far more than thyme and sugar, as your words hold a cornucopia of beautiful, delicate things that lift the human spirit! (big hugggsssssss) This is a gorgeous debut, sweet friend, these words are sweet beyond sugar, I love it! Welcome to Passions, sweet Heartpiper, may you be inspired by all of us here as we will all be inspired by your lovely words! I can't wait to read more of your satisfying poetry, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Heartpiper, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton I don't need no proof when it comes to God and truth |
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heartpiper Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 57 |
Capt Hair Many thanks for your comments. The art of poetry is an innovation and the art of translation is another type of innovation. I have attempted to “balance things out” and to transform the poetic scene as delicately as we carry a newly borne pretty babe. I would like to kindly ask you for more comments if you have any. Thanks a lot. Iyad Susan Caldwell Susan Thanks a lot for the warm welcome and I am pretty glad I came. Tapping foot to and singing happily. Hugs Earth Angel Thanks for the hugs and welcome J Glad you enjoyed the read. Glad indeed. Hugs and smiles. Iyad Bslicker Thanx from the heart Gringakiwi Glad this has reminded you of happy memories. Thanks a lot connie. “I like your name by the way” Iyad Mistletoe Angel Hey Noah I don’t know how to climb the throne of words you have established. I indeed feel flattered. It is the clean spirit abiding in your territories that render you look at this the way you looked at it. Very pleased to this poem shared with you. May God bless you with peace of mind and soul. With all due respects, I remain Iyad "Hallow the body as a temple to comeliness and sanctify the heart as a sacrifice to love; love recompenses the adorers." |
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