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Aenimal
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0 posted 2003-09-02 12:56 PM


that i would die
as gracefully as they
in brilliant array of color
not waning grey of flesh

how they part
in the dignity of natural purpose
as I straggle in the shame
of a man broken and lost


[This message has been edited by Aenimal (09-02-2003 01:02 AM).]

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angelblueyes
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1 posted 2003-09-02 12:58 PM


A different insight that you always bring to the page.Nicely done.
Crystal

timothysangel1973
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2 posted 2003-09-02 01:03 AM


Dang!  Aenimal, this was awesome...for lack of a better word so late in the day!  I love the message that you displayed.  

Thank You so much for taking the time and  participating in the challenge!

Tima

[This message has been edited by timothysangel1973 (09-02-2003 01:04 AM).]

Kaoru
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3 posted 2003-09-02 01:09 AM


Damn Raph, this is amazing. Well done!
Aenimal
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4 posted 2003-09-02 01:14 AM


thanks for the replies, hate to post and run but g'nite
littlewing
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5 posted 2003-09-02 06:03 AM


Raph, God . . . this is beautiful
you do know how to make death beautiful
and here, the significance of one
certainly does not compare to the other
but the blending is pure beauty
This is brilliant and something
I miss from you
*smile*
xxoo

Dark Angel
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6 posted 2003-09-02 08:36 AM


You have described it perfectly Sir Raph and yes.. if only we did as they.

Fantastic!

it's a

M

fate is not just
whose cooking  smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)


Brad Majors
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7 posted 2003-09-02 09:28 AM


awesome raph!
Enchantress
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8 posted 2003-09-02 09:42 AM


Extremely well written and much enjoyed Raph!
~Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~

~The breeze that kissed you on the face,
    Has held me in the same embrace~

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9 posted 2003-09-02 10:21 AM


*applause*... This is superb!!!
Nightshade
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10 posted 2003-09-02 10:22 AM


Wow!  Love the thoughts in this. Into my library it goes. hugs to you Raph. Chris

"Hope" is the thing with feathers
That perches in the soul ~
            Emily Dickinson




    

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11 posted 2003-09-02 11:24 AM


really great

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

nakdthoughts
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12 posted 2003-09-03 09:13 AM


perfect, Raph...


M

Susan Caldwell
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13 posted 2003-09-03 09:17 AM


Loved it!!  I love doing the whole fall/death thing...

Susan

Earth Angel
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14 posted 2003-09-03 09:49 AM


Your words fell down the page as gracefully as falling leaves...


EA

Kethry
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15 posted 2003-09-03 11:07 AM


awesome fallsome.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



Sunshine
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16 posted 2003-09-03 04:40 PM



You exceeded Tima's challenge.  Well done, Sir.

Lady Godiva
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17 posted 2003-09-03 08:45 PM




who would have thought fall would produce such an image? brillant...

Aenimal
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18 posted 2003-09-03 08:57 PM


Thank you all for the kind words wish i could respond to all individually but just stopping by quickly
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