Open Poetry #28 |
Sunday In The South |
timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
His voice like a fine wine in the morning even at 6 am, he is able to give me reassurance that all is well, though I feel beaten and blue by the day I just left behind. Not far down the hall, the kids lay in slumber bodies feeding on sweet dreams, preparing for another day. We tiptoe around the house being sure not to wake them, as this is our only time alone. Thirty minutes, a cup of coffee, and a little conversation between us is all I get for now. I see him out the door, standing in the open until he is no longer in my sight. I slip from house shoes back into a bed for two, yet this time I lie alone trying to find his warmth that was there only moments before. I remember what he said to me as he kissed me goodbye... "It won't always be this way baby, one day we will be able to live on 5 days instead of 7" This thought, and his smile carry me back to dream. [This message has been edited by timothysangel1973 (08-31-2003 07:51 AM).] |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
timothysangel1973 A delight to read, enjoyed. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Such a tender moment... take care of him... he's a |
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MsSouthernOrchid Member
since 2003-07-12
Posts 192 |
Good poem. Sunshine is right,he is a keeper. Hang on to the good ones, they are few and far in between now days. Hmmmm Did that sound cynical towards men? Hope not. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...better than eight days a week...James |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Tima, I really like this. I could feel the love between you too. Ain't love grand?? I loved this part.... I remember what he said to me as he kissed me goodbye... "It won't always be this way baby, one day we will be able to live on 5 days instead of 7" This thought, and his smile carry me back to dream. Very good writing, Hugs Ethel |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
another great penning of poetry,, terrifically done,,, |
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heartpiper Member
since 2003-09-02
Posts 57 |
The thoughts and emotions are clearly expressed here regards iyad "Hallow the body as a temple to comeliness and sanctify the heart as a sacrifice to love; love recompenses the adorers." |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
this is the most romantic thing i have read in some time...for it talks of real love...every day love...which is how love really is...nice job...helen |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I love this |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Tima . . . keep that dream . . . for us both please *smile* you had me right here: His voice like a fine wine in the morning even at 6 am, he is able to give me reassurance that all is well, though I feel beaten and blue by the day I just left behind. YESSS . . . Good for you Lady xxoo |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Hold onto that dream.This was beautiful. Crystal |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
The title drew me in and the poem did not dissappoint. Lovely writing |
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