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Open Poetry #28

What gives you the right?

kaleanna
Member

since 2003-08-18

Posts 89
TX, USA

0 posted 2003-08-31 09:41 PM

What gives you the right?
.
What gives you the right
to tread on my heart
to disrespect my feelings
right from the start?
.
What gives you the right
to tell me im wrong
to tear me down
instead of letting my heart soar
.
What gives you the right
to take my smile
and replace it with a frown
.
What gives you the right
to mistrust me
when i have been honest and true
.
Just because i am your wife
You dont have the right
to take those things from me
.
I deserve my heart to be treated
with love, care and tenderness
to be respected as i respect others
.
I deserve to be trusted as i trust others
to be able to let my heart soar
to reach for my dreams
.
and i deserve unconditional love
cause no one is perfect
and instead of wearing a frown,
I deserve to smile.
Meesh

icebox
Member Elite

since 2003-05-03

Posts 4383
in the shadows

1 posted 2003-08-31 10:16 PM

Four things:

Well done in putting strong, and obviously painful, emotions into verse;

uncoditional love is among the most difficult lesson for the human soul to learn;

a quote, "You don't know what a man is, until you have to please one;"

thank you for sharing this with us here.

garysgirl

Member Laureate

since 2002-09-29

Posts 19237
Florida, USA

2 posted 2003-08-31 10:45 PM

and i deserve unconditional love
cause no one is perfect
and instead of wearing a frown,
I deserve to smile.

Yes, you certainly do!! Everyone deserves to
have unconditional love from someone.
Hugs to you

Ethel

timothysangel1973

Senior Member

since 2001-12-03

Posts 1725
Never close enough

3 posted 2003-08-31 11:25 PM

You are finding your way little sister, you may be caught, but listen as your sould cries loud and tells you what to do. NEVER be surrounded by a person that can't or won't love you as you deserve to be loved. You a beautiful because you are life and no one deserves to feel un-loved. Alone is better than feeling that you aren't appreciated, because when you are alone you have no one to expect anything from but YOURSELF!

Wonderful write ladybug!

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