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We Meet Again |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
She walks up slowly so that my eyes linger on her movement, From fine coiffed hair down to heels and superbly painted toe nails, Taking the time to look and enjoying the time as it’s spent, And as she comes closer the aroma of her female smells. I have noticed her all but she pauses a while Knowing that a few more moments now won’t matter Just like last time she looks at me without a smile, Like sculptured beauty neither happy or sadder. In a short moment that seems like a day She greets me much too formally and cold Which means she’d rather not be there today Filled with those memories that have grown old. Rings and jewelry ornamental, She dressed up sparing no expense, All for show not sentimental Using her money as a defense. We said what we had to, No extra words as before Said too quickly and few Then she went to the door. I remember that walk from the last time she left me standing In a pool of fragrance and a vast flood of unused emotions, Now I held an envelop with what she once was demanding, All was even and all was done to it’s final completion. Gloom |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"Just like last time she looks at me without a smile," I find that hard to believe... nicely told M |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Nakdthoughts For taking the time to read and respond, This poem is just an attempt at character building for prose I am writing, Just a touch of fiction in a different manner. Gloom |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Professor, Good write, enjoyed the read. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Rings and jewelry ornamental, She dressed up sparing no expense, All for show not sentimental Using her money as a defense." ~ Speaks volumes! I enjoy the informality of this write. It is as if you are recounting a real event in your life, in a conversation.  EA |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Seymour, Pleased you enjoyed Thank you, Earth Angel, I do expect that this might get moved to just prose, Which is why the long lines, To give the more prose feel I’ve always that poetic lines should be rather short Full of expression. Your comments are a pleasure. Gloom |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Gloom...Enjoyed. I don't have the confidence to try and write prose or free verse, so my hats off to you. I remember that walk from the last time she left me standing In a pool of fragrance and a vast flood of unused emotions, Now I held an envelop with what she once was demanding, All was even and all was done to it’s final completion. A perfect ending...Paul "To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you" [This message has been edited by Paul Wilson (08-31-2003 09:46 PM).] |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Thank you, Paul, Well, confidence is something I don’t lack in my writing, Time is. I’ve been working on the prose for about two months and although have a full plan Have but two chapters written out as I want them. Try some prose or free verse if you have the time, I’m sure you’ll do well. Your comments are very welcome. Gloom |
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