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Chapter 4
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Chapter 4 |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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Written Exposure I could never mess things up In a little way If I did it I did it big Two rules I broke Almost simultaneously And to this day I pay with humiliation I told myself I would never love you I knew who you were And knew that wasn’t enough But your kiss Made me wanton And your laugh Made me alive I ached for you With every breath And every beat Of a heart resurrected So I did what I do I wrote about it And gave it to you Second rule broken |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
yup..I have learned my lesson well~~~ *s M |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
"I could never mess things up In a little way If I did it I did it big" ..YES! This is me, mama always said that I was the only one of her kids that couldn't just screw up a little...I had to rock the entire world with my mistakes. "I told myself I would never love you I knew who you were And knew that wasn’t enough" ...Oh Susan, this makes me ache inside. When we are lonely, we often settle for far less than we deserve. "But your kiss Made me wanton And your laugh Made me alive I ached for you With every breath And every beat Of a heart resurrected" ...Just what a broken heart looks for, something in life that is sweet, and happy and makes us feel alive again. Even though it is wrong. And the aching...ahh, yes the aching. That's what makes us keep going back even though our intuition tells us better.  Susan, this was wonderful, I'm ready for the next part. You've created a monster here. xxoo, Tima A woman has got to love a bad man once or twice in her life, to be thankful for a good one. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
M~Yes...as have I...after I post them all I will tell you the biggest lesson of all... Tima~Thank you so much for reading and understanding. Susan |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
on a roll with your ongoing display of brilliance |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I could never mess things up In a little way If I did it I did it big it's the only way to go, haven't replied to all yet but l#vin the series |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Susan - this one written with some pain, I can sense it in your words... BC |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Aenimal~True...lol..thank you for reading them!  Susan |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Bill~ Yes you are right...she is in pain. Thank you for reading. Susan |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
...waiting for chapter 5. This is good. Fresh, original, interesting, and well written. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Chapter 5?? lol...thought I would just leave it as is... Thank you for your kind words.. Susan |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This keeps getiing better and better.You are truly holding all of our atteniton.  Crystal |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you Crystal. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
Holding mine with clenched fist, indeed! Love it. |
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Kahlil Senior Member
since 2003-04-12
Posts 1881 |
Susan, your chapter poems are intriguing, and you've captured our interest with emotions with which we all can identify. Are you SURE there isn't a chapter 5???? ~K~ |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
arghhhh me too Susan, me too . . . I ached for you With every breath And every beat Of a heart resurrected So I did what I do I wrote about it And gave it to you Second rule broken priceless lines, m'lady xxoo |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Kahlil~Thank you! Yes I was teasing when I said there wasn't a fifth chapter..there are several more and 5 is posted..I hope you enjoy. Sue~Thank you so much!  Susan |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Meg~ Sorry I missed you before! Thank you! Susan |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Susan, like so many others here, I really relate to that statement about messing things up big time!!!! I think it must just be the nature of a creative mind to not do something just a little...if you win, you win BIG, but if you lose, you go all the way to the bottom!! Loved this, girl, and am on my way to Chapter 5!!!! ~S~ Accept these small gifts from my gypsy heart ~~S~~ |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
bump |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
ok, well at least I know not to do that then! thanks! Great job! Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
your on your way,,, |
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J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
I'm getting more and more curious |
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