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Open Poetry #28

Among ants and bees

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

0 posted 2003-08-31 06:05 AM

Among ants and bees

I have to be in the mood for you

there’s something about the way
you cock your head at me
sitting there
waiting

waiting for god knows what

your eyes mark your face
like a black tick
your pheasant hair erects fan-like
behind your crown
golden and wispy

wingless queen

you of the seventh sigh
you could not have been born
with Saturn in your eyes

No

a slingshot mouth only causes pain

fate is not just
whose cooking smells good
but which way the wind blows

(Ani DiFranco)

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (08-31-2003 06:47 AM).]

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

1 posted 2003-08-31 08:26 AM

What an image!
Excellent writing, Maree!

Do it again!

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2003-08-31 08:33 AM

Dark Angel
A well done dark write, enjoyed.

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

3 posted 2003-08-31 12:33 PM

Maree

I feel a bit of bee venom in these stinging words...so well done, dear friend!

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

4 posted 2003-08-31 01:03 PM

I know quite a few of these kings and queens

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

5 posted 2003-08-31 01:09 PM

Yikes!

But so very well done.

Ed

Aimster
Member Elite

since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

6 posted 2003-08-31 05:04 PM

wow! i felt the "sting" in this one
for sure, such a brilliant creative
write you've spun here m'dear. excellent!
hugs!
amy

"love is like a butterfly--
if you chase it,
it will surely fly away,instead
hold it close and watch it grow into
something beautiful"
~me~

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

7 posted 2003-08-31 05:07 PM

Ouch!!!!I felt the sting in this.
Crystal

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