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Open Poetry #28

Ladelie

Eromyna
Member

since 2002-11-29

Posts 306
Pheonix, AZ, USA

0 posted 2003-08-29 10:00 AM

Ladelie Orlando played piano
in the shadows
kissed the keys
with frozen fingertips
embued with bluish elegance

She remenisced
let time eclipse
and welcomed it
with blackened lips

"I don't need to scream for you to deem me aggravation."

KristieSue

Senior Member

since 2003-01-31

Posts 1460
PA, US

1 posted 2003-08-29 10:01 AM

interesting picture...nice job

Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2003-08-29 10:04 AM

definitely dark...

M

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

3 posted 2003-08-29 10:04 AM

interesting images..and a hint of classic macabre..

I enjoyed

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2003-08-29 02:45 PM

kissed the keys
with frozen fingertips
embued with bluish elegance

She remenisced
let time eclipse

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love the inner rhymes and assonance of this...most of all the imagery and haunting essence of the write..all of which was created with tight succinct verse.
very cool poem poetess Shay.

When was the last time you felt high
Oh you were the best I've ever felt
Its so wrong not to be with you
Its getting harder to stay away.

SH

Kielo
Senior Member

since 2002-02-11

Posts 1109

5 posted 2003-08-29 03:26 PM

I was going to quote my favourite part.... but then I realised that the whole thing is amazing, it all hit me, it's all beautiful.

(I play piano.... I love the imagery, and I get background music with it in my head....

)

Kielo

I'll never forget you.... I know that much, despite my foolishness.

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

6 posted 2003-08-29 03:47 PM

I have to agree with Keilo, I get music in my head to this also.Very dark, but very deep.
Crystal

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