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Chapter 1 |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida 
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The Second Meeting I was caught off guard By your presence Later, I was caught off guard By my feelings It was a love story In the making Or so I thought Or maybe hoped I ran to you Threw my arms around you You smelled of familiar comfort Your arms around me Felt like a shield You felt like the lost love you were It had been a lifetime In all that had changed for both of us And the timing seemed right We went to lunch That same day But no one ate We drove and talked Catching up On that lifetime That had passed And what was to be Hints of unfinished business We both knew We wanted to finish Now that we had come together Again |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
is this personal experience? if so, I hope there's a Ch. 2, etc. this is sweet... Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
You captured the feeling well, I know this and hope it turns out well. Finally a pic  !! |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Susan, This was a very enjoyable, fresh, and well written piece of writing. Enjoyed! Now...how about us having lunch on Tuesday?  PS ~ Haven't I seen you somewhere before? |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
KristieSue-Thank you! There is more... Aenimal-You know, after I did that picture, being a girl and all, I decided I don't like it...lol oh well, it's there now... Mike-lol, so now you want to have lunch? Just tell me where... Susan |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Susan, Well, I will be at the base on Tuesday, we could meet in the Food Court at the NEX? |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Awesome poem. Is that a pic of you |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
I was caught off guard By your presence Later, I was caught off guard By my feelings Astounding and truly poetic, real...I loved this...thank you for sharing |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
Susan, "I ran to you Threw my arms around you You smelled of familiar comfort" I just love that smell, "familiar comfort" You described this well, you painted a picture in my mind. Good write. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this so much... it captivated me from beginning to end! *S* |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
love is so grand!!!!! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Mike-Sounds good, but what time? Dan- Thank you! Yep, that's me. Lee-Thank you so much! Miah-Thank you! Suthern-Thank you bernie- Vandana- Back at you!QJQ-Sometimes it is.. Susan |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
yep, you're alot like me |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
Whatever time is good for you, Susan. Since I will be on leave, I'll be in civies. Looking forward to meeting you. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
The smell, the arms, all too familiar places for me.. Sometimes, I like to imagine the smell of that person.. sometimes, it's gut wrenching.. But you you painted the picture of breathing him right in and never forgetting that you love the scent.. Nice picture, by the by. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
and chapter 2? slacker....  |
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KristieSue
since 2003-01-31
Posts 1460PA, US |
lunch? is mike buyin'? I'll be there! LOL Failure isn't failure if a lesson from it is learned ~ KS |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Hints of unfinished business We both knew We wanted to finish Now that we had come together Again enjoying your warmth of words... M |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Dixie-Yes I knew that, which is why I enjoy you writings so much.. Mike-11? How will I know you? Can you wear a big pink rose in your hair? Kaoru-ahhh, smell...smell is so important to me..give me a man that smells good and I will be glued to him...and thanks for reading! Ron-Slacker?? I told you I was writing these so you should know I have them ALL written already....but ask and you shall receive I just need to tweek......Are you back or just online? (I am at home today, daughter had the biopsy yesterday). KristieSue-Mike says everyone can come and he is picking up the tab...and, he is so generous, if we want to say screw work, we can move to the beach and drink ourselves silly...again all on him!!! Mike is the MAN!! M-Thank you so much! Susan |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
I so enjoyed this and look forward to more Crystal |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Thank you very much Crystal! |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
lol! You are too funny, Sue. Btw...pink is my favorite color. 1100 is fine. We can meet outside in the Food Court. I'll be wearing a Pittsburgh Pirate pin-stripe button down shirt (untucked of course), shorts, and flip-flops (my standard get-around-town-summer-get-up). And about that tab...you must of talked to my fellow coworkers lol. Drinks on the beach, sounds good to me! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Flip-Flops?? Okay, but I am coming from work (some of us do that) so I will not be wearing flip-flops....I still think the pink rose is a good idea... Susan |
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Opeth Senior Member
since 2001-12-13
Posts 1543The Ravines |
~ We shall see, Susan. But, unless something comes up, I will be there. |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
(sssshhhh.....LOL, I feel like I'm interrupting) But, Susan, I loved this and am looking forward to the nest chapter. And this part.... I ran to you Threw my arms around you You smelled of familiar comfort After my Gary and I see each other and have to leave each again....we hate to even take a bath or change clothes because we want to keep the smell of each other close by. That smell can do something to you, can't it? Especially when it's a good, familiar smell. Ummmm!!  Hugs to you  Ethel (okay, I'm outta here, guys. You can get back to your talk. LOL)  [This message has been edited by garysgirl (08-29-2003 01:59 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Where's Chapter 2?  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Ethel- You are not interrupting...Mike and I just discovered recently that we live in the same town and work on the same Naval base...just trying to get together to meet...as for the smell...yes exactly!! Kar-It's here...I posted it this morning...lol Susan |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
Susan - most lovely verse... BC |
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timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
Well, I read Chapter 2 before reading Chapter 1...now I am ready for Chapter 3 )))hugs((( Tima |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
bump |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh wow! Love it! ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Dan~lol, thanks! Enchantress~Thank you Susan |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
lets put them all togeather |
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