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cusick
Senior Member

since 2003-07-27

Posts 668

0 posted 2003-08-04 01:44 PM

DARK JOURNEY

No turning back.
The cage door's closed.
Down we plummet,
faster than my heart beat.

Are we rising?
It's an illusion.
Downwards,
close to hell.

Cage unlocked
we meet our mentor,
urging men to
watch their language.

Under tunnels,
deep dark places.
Shining teeth in
blackened faces.

Tour has ended,
back to daylight.
On a sigh
I breathe amen.

Discarding lamp,
boots and knee pads.
Unique experience but
I'll never go down that again.

[This message has been edited by Sunshine (08-05-2003 06:54 AM).]

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2003-08-04 01:58 PM

cusick
Interesting read.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2003-08-04 06:16 PM

On a sigh,
I breath. Amen!

Very good, Maggie!

Miah
Senior Member

since 2002-08-26

Posts 1062
Pennsylvania

3 posted 2003-08-04 08:08 PM

Too close for comfort! Good write Cusick.

Darklight
Junior Member

since 2003-08-04

Posts 12
Sweden

4 posted 2003-08-05 03:11 AM

Thank your for your poem
with your words you caught
a certain atmosphere that
I well can relate to

Love,

L

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

5 posted 2003-08-05 03:13 AM

awesome ending!

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

6 posted 2003-08-05 06:55 AM

Maggie, check your e-mail.

angelblueyes
Member Elite

since 2003-07-19

Posts 2148
Oklahoma

7 posted 2003-08-05 07:37 AM

I like the ending to this.
angelblueyes

D'sWhisper
Member

since 2003-06-16

Posts 68
Washington, USA

8 posted 2003-08-26 04:45 PM

How wonderful. I see this as a journey into that wonderful inspiration of art...Depression. Very well said...and I enjoyed it. It really began to flow around the 3 stanza and ended with a wonderful soothing slope to complement a climax that never really came. Great write! ~DW~

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

9 posted 2003-08-26 04:54 PM

enjoyed

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

10 posted 2003-08-26 06:07 PM

Maggie,

nope, don't want to travel there anytime soon but thank you for allowing me to see
this is awesome
xxoo

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

11 posted 2003-08-26 06:49 PM

I once went spilunking with my daughter, it was dark, damp and totally suffocating. Your poem brought back so many memories. Thanks...I think.
Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

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