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Alchemy ...... an impromptu with Serenity
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Alchemy ...... an impromptu with Serenity |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa 
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who shall corner the wind? I will bend the breeze bring it's cool to fevered brow allowances of reverences speaking inner needs from languages of yesteryears it flickers... speaking of what isn't seen the black within the flame envelopes holds the secret to the light and takes over the storm feeds itself rippling in it's majesty progressing blackening the head bows layering self upon the self build this wall and look for glint to spite the black the hint of alchemy the will of steel beneath my disbelieving eye do you doubt it's tempering rain? flake the rock in reprimand the answer is miles beneath chisel underneath the pain you sculpt with blurry eyes yes, the sun will rise eroding gain even as the vein explodes the means to see will beckon from hermit's lantern held on high third eye reckons watch the sparrow on the rooftop cry casting shadows a winged thought all alone but for the drip of melting night in the stillness at the peak before dawn raindrops shiver down the wing and drain into the blank of cobblestone a glance reveals the walk smoothed to silk by calloused feet of patterns then crouching takes flight gathers against the black wall we fly arrow slung (the sky is mine) to pierce this void a battlecry of glass (cooing of a dove) reflecting us fast till a point is honed and light.... (glint of what we know is home) is tomorrow coned the serpent writhes in rise and the mirror winks at smoke |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace |
big SIGH !!!! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
Oh you know i L@VE this..awesome |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
I could have SWORN I saw this poem somewhere! "the hint of alchemy" I would say.....yes Lovely, you are. (hehe) |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Karen and Bri? I must say somehow I feel like you guys should be handing out cigars? *wink* the black within the flame envelopes holds the secret to the light Yes . . . it is all right here Stunning you guys weilded beauty xxoo |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
you melt together in this...so well done! |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
WOAH... I second that big SIGH This is amazing work, you two! |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
the will of steel beneath my disbelieving eye do you doubt it's tempering rain? flake the rock in reprimand the answer is miles beneath chisel underneath the pain you sculpt with blurry eyes yes, the sun will rise eroding gain even as the vein explodes the means to see will beckon from hermit's lantern held on high third eye reckons watch the sparrow on the rooftop cry casting shadows a winged thought all alone but for the drip of melting night in the stillness at the peak before dawn raindrops shiver down the wing and drain into the blank of cobblestone a glance reveals the walk smoothed to silk by calloused feet of patterns then crouching takes flight gathers against the black wall we fly arrow slung (the sky is mine) to pierce this void a battlecry of glass (cooing of a dove) reflecting us fast till a point is honed and light.... (glint of what we know is home) is tomorrow coned the serpent writhes in rise and the mirror winks at smoke ============================= How am I supposed to pick fave lines in this...good grief...the images are so awesome!! Impromptu? more like Spontaneous Euphoria  Stunning write of two who breathe as one.  You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name ... |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks for reading. and thank YOU bri... for everything.  |
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Jason Lyle Senior Member
since 2003-02-07
Posts 1438With my darkling |
You guys apart are skilled and a pleasure to read, together...you give me writers block and humble me. Jason |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Geez, you two make ME wink at the end... good stuff...collaborate again soon, please? |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Geez Louise... this is IMPROMPTU??? LOL Excellent collaboration! *S* chisel underneath the pain you sculpt with blurry eyes yes, the sun will rise eroding gain Yup... I know this. *S* |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Karen and Brian together..a readers dream come true.. And so well proven...a very stunning, meaningful writing... Susan |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
ahhh..sorry forgot to put it on in the library... |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
thank you everybody  |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
ohhh not getting off that easy . . . this beauty needs to breathe . . . |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Oh my...how did I miss this one? This?...and the two of you?...gorgeous. You simply melt together in perfection. I am privileged to have found this today. Love you both...   "My friends are my estate." ~Emily Dickinson [This message has been edited by vlraynes (08-29-2003 05:01 PM).] |
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