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When you Write with Love
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When you Write with Love |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart 
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When you Write with Love When I awoke this morn, I looked around ~ and what broke my heart, was the silent sound of no one breathing, and no heart’s beat ~ there lay a note…a heartbreak…complete. While the missive I read gave my eyes their sting, there, wrapped in foil, lay her ring, and without reading the letter, word for word, I knew it was full of those feelings I’d heard. She doesn’t belong here anymore, her heart now skips on another’s shore, for he spoke to her in cadence so fine now her heart is no longer mine. He used expression with karmic song then asked her to please, sing along, took her heartstrings, plucked them well she will no longer be compelled to listen to my words, or hear my voice, I’ve lost her by my very choice, to not hear her, nor her words of love, she’s packed her things, flew like a dove... She doesn’t live here anymore, she’s flown off for other shores, and only lingering traces of her kiss will I feel in a cool dawn’s mist. He drew poetic pictures, and lured her in and thus did their soul’s dance begin, he took her love, which once was mine impressed upon her, his words entwined, he spoke of things she must have missed, for he sealed his messages with love, and a kiss, he promised her the moon, under starry skies, he would sip wine while he gazed in her eyes, so intoxicated she must have become, that by my silence, to him she’s run, and I cannot blame her any more, that she’s run toward those distant shores. When I awoke this morn and looked around what broke my heart was that silent sound there is no one breathing, no heart’s beat ~ here laid the note…making a heartbreak…complete. ~*~ Revised 8/2003 |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
what a beautiful literary genre you have penned,, |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She doesn’t belong here anymore, her heart now skips on another’s shore, for he spoke to her in cadence so fine now her heart is no longer mine. ================================= based on "another note" from this morn...... you will already know why this one has left me lacking words.............. * no fair making me cry, I just got me mothy make up on.* *library bound* You're going to hear my voice in the morning calling your name ... |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Hi Karilea, what I love about your writings is the diversity of subjects and many styles. You are such a fabulous poetess. My friend from KCMO is on her way and I'm hoping you are in the car with her!!! See you in a day or two. ;-) Huggles, Marti |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
If she comes to Boston, you'd better well be planning to share... I did, after all...  This is wonderful, Sunshine - Superbly creative...  |
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Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
She doesn’t live here anymore, she’s flown off for other shores, and only lingering traces of her kiss will I feel in a cool dawn’s mist. The tears fell with this one, Karilea. You left me shaking my head yet again. Patricia |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
wow  loved it |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Karilea . . . a perfect masterpiece you have no idea how close this hits home xxoo |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
Your words give me flight |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Lovely...James |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Now THAT's the way to say it....exquisite. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Lisann Member
since 2001-01-31
Posts 350 |
very beautiful piece.....great job. |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Karilea, this one is beautiful and bitterly sad. It is sad that people so quickly forget what true love is all about. “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
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DbarrM Junior Member
since 2003-08-26
Posts 14 |
Im so glad I found this place, To see words like this brings happyness to my heart. DbarrM |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this was a cherished read my friend...God bless you and wishing you much faith and happiness...now excuse me while I go find some kleenex...incredible write |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Karilea, Loved the new picture!! And I love the writing, so sad... Susan |
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