»
Archives
»
Open Poetry #28
»
Silhouette (Duet By Ringo and Littlewing)
| Open Poetry #28 |
|
Silhouette (Duet By Ringo and Littlewing) |
|
|
littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
|
From the look in your eyes I see the hurt beneath your smile Mask of pride, you hide the pain like a treasure in a golden locket much alive, yet forgotten Dead to all who seek, yourself Alive to none Most of all your heart, this chamber rattles rusty bones The cemetary drones listen . . . The ghosts of the past are calling Can you hear their plaintive cry? Moaning, morning the loss You feel so deep inside that smile Take my hand, I lend to thee freely walk this path of disease I hear the beating, not unlike my own laden lying like a stone undigested Feeeel it . . . You are not doomed To wander through the Darkness Alone, deprived of Light Stale air stealing life from your soul empty Break through this fog which binds you And breathe . . . You will find me there, waiting [This message has been edited by littlewing (08-24-2003 04:04 PM).] |
||
| © Copyright 2003 Sue Eckam - All Rights Reserved | |||
|
Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Break through this fog which binds you And breathe . . . You will find me there, waiting ~ I love happy endings!  You du-et very well!  EA |
||
Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
A mysterious duet, complimented well. great job to you both. |
||
|
Brigid WillowKeeper Member
since 2003-08-24
Posts 88OHIO IN USA |
That is very good. The beginning seems to be a tad average for darker poems, the then it really goes into it. Great job!  |
||
Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
I would like to thank littlewing publicly for being such an inspiring partner and for making this such a fun task. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
||
|
Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
Sue,when is it my turn!?  lol...  If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. [This message has been edited by Ceinwyn (08-24-2003 08:14 PM).] |
||
|
icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Very well done!!!! |
||
|
inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Feeeel it . . . if only some could nice work both of you, couldnt tell the batter from the pitcher, well something like that......it just flowed as one voice, really good |
||
Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Bravo you two! Well done! hugs, Chris  "Hope" is the thing with feathers |
||
|
Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
nice flow and rhythm two silhouettes dancing, in blue notes |
||
|
littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Linda lol on the wordplay there thank you Thank you Barry, coming from you that means a lot to me Brigid - thank you, wasnt meant to be dark, just writing . . . welcome Brad, I must say . . . this was a fun write and you are such a pleasure to write with. Thank you for this and for always nudging me along with my writing Kris, buzz me . . . *smile* oooh what would we write about? icey . . wow - thank you so much! Thank you Michele, was a write that flowed nicely . . . Thank you so much Chris Kacy, yes, exactly . . . reading my mind, get outta there, it's scary . . . thank you Thanks guys xxoo |
||
|
BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Nice to have someone on the other side, who is waiting for you...... Kudos you two~ |
||
|
Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
nice write you two |
||
|
El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
Wow! This is really good. Another excellent duet to put in the library... “We are all travelers in the wilderness of this world, and the best that we can find in our travels is an honest friend.” –Robert Louis Stevenson |
||
|
timothysangel1973
since 2001-12-03
Posts 1725Never close enough |
What a beautiful duet, by two wonderful writers. As always, I have a chosen line... "The ghosts of the past are calling Can you hear their plaintive cry? Moaning, morning the loss You feel so deep inside that smile" ...Did the two of you peek into my soul when I wasn't looking? This deserves a bump! Great Job  Tima |
||
|
Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
littlewing - excellent duet you two... BC |
||
|
Patricia Member Elite
since 2003-04-06
Posts 2160Missouri |
You are not doomed To wander through the Darkness Alone, deprived of Light Stale air stealing life from your soul empty Break through this fog which binds you And breathe . . . You will find me there, waiting Wow, you two...what a duet! A great read for me this morning. Patricia |
||
|
littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Bluesy . . . we all do and thank you tweets Thank you Raph, where've ya been, man? Miss you here Ben, thank you so much Tima, that was Brad peeking in lol (his lines) thank you - thanks for the bump! Thank you Bill, *smile* Thanks Patricia lol Brad's lines again) ahahah you see Brad? *smile* thanks guys xxoo |
||
|
Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
Just popping in to mirror Sue's thanks and to clear up a few things... Yes, the first set were my words, although, Patricia, Sue did some major editing to the lines you enjoyed. I cannot take the credit for both of us working on that. Thanks again. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
||
|
SharaRose Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2501Somewhere out there~ |
The worst kind of disease.. feeling alone. When the fog clears being there is the easy part..it's getting the fog to clear for them to start that's the real work. All the best with your friend, or relative you are trying to get the breakthrough with. They are worth it all!!!!!!!! I know how you feel. Best of luck with this. They are a shining star if they would only realize it inside! Keep up the great work encouraging them!!! If only they saw themselves the way we see them!!!  SharaRose @-->-- Of sound, and speech let all lift the hearer! |
||
|
angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
This was wonderful.Two voices united as one to speak the words from within.You two make a great writing pair. Crystal |
||
|
littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Brad is lying . . . Thank you Shara and yes, alone and lonely truly are the worst Thanks angel, you always have the sweetest things to say to me/us hehe Thanks guys xxoo |
||
|
|
⇧ top of page ⇧ |
|
| All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format. | ||
