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Watching Someone Watching Someone Watch (Karens' Challenge)
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Watching Someone Watching Someone Watch (Karens' Challenge) |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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Out of the corner peeking idly, he waits watching every muscle ripple with each clickety-clack for hours I sit feeling lines of life with each rise of chest and release of breath He thinks I am caught as a deer in headlights yet I see what he does not two worlds One in front of me and one to the side ----------------------------------------------- /pip/Forum7/HTML/000582.html [This message has been edited by littlewing (08-21-2003 07:35 PM).] |
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gringakiwi Member
since 2003-08-05
Posts 189 |
Excellent... and I am curious to know more about this particular situation! (and about the clickety clack!) again..excellent  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
GLEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEE!!!!  mirrors in mirrors in mirrors infinity! I knew one of my crazy ladies would do this--shaking my head, Sue... thank you kindly my sista...wonderful, and yes, I had to suppress the urge to watch you watch him watching...oh somebody STOP me!!! love you lady... (can ya tell I'm having fun here?)  |
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Edder Senior Member
since 2003-04-02
Posts 671 |
oh my, you DO have a way with words! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
--and I enjoyed watching you watching someone watching someone watch... I suppose we are never truly alone! Someone--or some thing!--is always watching! Perish the thought!   EA |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
I like it! I left feeling a little disturbed at the thought that someone is watching... Susan |
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Ringo 
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
I guess Rockwell was right when he sang about somebody watching him... This is an excellent job, lady... We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
gee, sue, i feel like im being peeped just looking in here |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Excellent job LW, now you guys are peaking my interest..... |
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angelblueyes Member Elite
since 2003-07-19
Posts 2148Oklahoma |
Wonderfully done.Someone watching someone else. Crystal |
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dreambuilder Member
since 2003-03-23
Posts 319caddyshack |
I believe its - you watching someone watching you watch someone else,who is also watching you but that would be too long of a title - lol great write - challenge well met I'm sure |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Very good! You met the challenge very well, and added a third dimension! |
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NewEnglandlazurlu Member Rara Avis
since 2002-01-04
Posts 7470A Mountain Paradise |
Hi Sue, I enjoyed this very much. It is fascinating to sit and watch. Huggles, Marti |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
astounding write lady Jane...as always thank you |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Love the way see things tweets~ Quite clever you are, and always so good! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
kiwi - it is nothing more than me typing, clickety clack and someone watching me while I do so thank you ahahahah K - I knew you would love this one, saw your reply somewhere in here and said hmmmm . . I can do that LOL thank you so much for always making me think Edder - you are so sweet - thank you so much Linda, always , I know ewwww . . . lol thank you Susan LOL - is ok - is just a write . . . but yes disturbiing, God especially if you didnt know! aghhhhhhhhhhhhh thank you Brad . . . LOL Rockwell - I havent heard that in soo long lmaooo yes, you are right . . thank you Michele, LMAO . . sorry bout that . . . Is that good or bad? Magnus, now coming from you that means a lot to me . . . LOL thank you Thank you Crystal - truly ahahaha Mike, you got it . . . where have you been? Thank you Karilea, thank you so much, it is all K's fault Marti , thank you so much, yes, it sure is Lee thank you so much , Lady Jane? Bluesy, thank you - you always make me smile with your replies . . . Thanks guys xxoo |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
I love this...wonderfully visual and your last line fantastic. ~hugs~  Tracie Love is the life of the soul... |
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