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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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"I propose a toast," he smiled. "to my wife, of just one year-- congratulations to us both-- somehow we survived." The ghost did not reply. |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
ummmm the ghost??? I'm trying sooo hard to sound intelligent here...maybe I'm trying to hard to understand everyone today  Kristen If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
What? No replies? It may be short but impacts quite well! Enjoyed! ~Tier |
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CrAzI_bAbI_cHiKa Member
since 2003-07-16
Posts 248 |
i like...  wit lotsa luv n a lil luck this chika's gonna go play wit a hockey puck (literally, not that way, you sick minded ppl...sheesh) Keryn(Crazi/hockeyluva) |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
needs to be reread. perhaps my mind is not smart enough..waddya expect..I'm no genus? lol genius. I most certainly am not. Although I still managed to enjoy  insanity is not a crime |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
sigh. At least I titled it appropriately. chuckle. Not a major theme folks--it is just what it is. A wedding anniversary--the husband toasts his wife, joking that they "survived." The ghost is his wife. The idea being that not only did they both NOT survive, but he hadn't even noticed her pass away... and of course? This is all fiction. Thanks for reading. |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
woah, seren..damn good writing as usual.. I've come to expect it. I'm a fan. |
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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA |
Hmmmm, karen..i have not been married, but damn, this representation of the degree to which someone can be ignored, unseen and unappreciated, yes, i know this. when he couldn't see me, i didn't exist. and sometimes, when he could, other things were more important. glad its fiction, but wow, u couldn't have penned it better. Library! Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
igotit! igotit!  great write, my serene friend... regards sudhir |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Karen, well, I for one have been that "ghost" and this write gave me chills of rememberance. Excellent. hugs, Chris |
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Fee Member
since 2000-08-07
Posts 381Melbourne, Australia |
Hmmm Marriage can do that to a person. I liked. Fee Expressions, |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
a ghost indeed...oh I got it alright.. I was a ghost in my childhood. Excellent Karen! Susan C. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Oh I got it...just wished I didnt... (for the both of us) Here--let me--its my turn to clean the mirrors.    "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
That last line makes one wonder, doesn't it?? It made me think as to what you meant,. and then it forced me to think of what it meant to me. Truly the work of one of the grand mistresses of the arts. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Fiction? That was the hardest fictitious punch I've felt in a long time... It's been a year? ye'gads... were we having fun?  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
serenity blaze - I understand perfectly ye witch of the cypress... BC |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
I understand this, but then I live as a ghost. Nice to see you manage a "short" write. (Yes, I do know that size doesn't matter.) |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
thanks for jamming on the toast, good poets. and ice? um, yeah, sure. Size? It doesn't matter.  I do seem to have trouble doing the short ones though. Love to all...serenity exits, adjusting her halo...  |
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Miah Senior Member
since 2002-08-26
Posts 1062Pennsylvania |
I don't know this really caught my attention. I read it several times. Great poem.  |
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chillidriver New Member
since 2003-08-03
Posts 7 |
don't ever remember you saying size doesn't matter seren. must be a ghost of the person I knew. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
K - sorry I havent been in here . . . I know . . . xxoo |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
*reaches over with a soft cloth*...you missed a spot on that halo... Love you, Karen...   "My friends are my estate." |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd! a short and powerful punch |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Yeah, the short ones are good, they just have to be able to drive it home... um..like this one. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
rictus grin sigh anniversary |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
What a tasty little poem....and I do like surprises! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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