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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... 
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Turn the Page... When the story you are reading Is the life that you are leading And you find you're constant pleading For a peace that is receding When the answers are misleading And it seems there's no succeeding Simply know you are misreading Turn the page When it seems there is no meaning And the tears are intervening If it's towards the dark you're leaning Turn the page When the winds of change are blowing And you're left alone in knowing That the love's no longer showing Turn the page When it's peace your heart is seeking Yet you constant hear the shrieking Of the inner voices speaking Turn the page When the final chapter's pending And there's no more use pretending That there's wisdom in defending What your heart is comprehending Take the road that is ascending Grant your spirit peaceful mending Dip the quill and write the ending Sign the page ~vlraynes "My friends are my estate." ~Emily Dickinson [This message has been edited by vlraynes (08-18-2003 07:30 PM).] |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is an awesome poem. I like the way the words flow. Cold hands means a warm heart |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
* ~*~ ~>>~ wonderful penning ~<<~ ~*~ *  ~~~117 up here today~~~  [This message has been edited by QjQ (08-18-2003 05:20 PM).] |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Vicky Indeed, there is much wisdom and truth in this, my friend...one of your best!  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
HeyBuddy~ This is really COOL~ Love the all of it ... it chants melodically~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Vicky this has to be your best yet!! Wonderful words of wisdom here as well. Beautifully penned. ~Summertime Smiles & Hugs, Nancy~ ~The breeze that kissed you on the face, |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Stanzas of monorhyme, I see... kewl beans...  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
awesome...no matter what you call the technique or form--this truly has a hypnotic quality to the meter--I could have sworn I heard Danny Kaye reading this as I followed along. smile. It's got a great message, a groovin' beat, and I could dance to it. I give it a 10. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Here ya go Miss Vicky, I told you I would find it and I did: The movie is "The Court Jester" starring Danny Kaye. The lines I were talking about are: "The vessel with the pestle has the pellet with the poison and the chalice with the palace has the brew that is true," Here's the link, and if you like old movies? You should rent this one. 'Tis a classic, m'friend. http://www.mydannykaye.com/biography3.html HUGS you.  |
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Bill Charles Member Patricius
since 2000-07-11
Posts 10619highways, & byways, for now |
vicky - the pages have been turned, as in your writing. I like what you have written here... BC |
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Skyfire
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
you know what? you're wise  Loved it There's nothing like a good fight with a horse to put your problems into perspective |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
vlraynes I agree with Martie, one of your best.  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
When the final chapter's pending And there's no more use pretending That there's wisdom in defending What your heart is comprehending Take the road that is ascending Grant your spirit peaceful mending Dip the quill and write the ending Sign the page =============================== wisdom wrapped in your gift for rhymes this is very clever and cool poetess Vicky... turn the other cheek ... turn the page ... tis time the poetry comes of age  "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Vicky...you have several bests, and this should be placed with them. I agree with Serenity - I was hearing a voice too, and she was spot-on in bringing in Danny Kaye's old movie... You know when things are over...some folks insist on rehashing a paragraph or a page or chapter, but you have to know when to sign the page...and close the book. And before you say it...yes, I'm still working on it!  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
Oh this was so good... Turn the page...hmmm, I wish..mine are sticking togeher.. Truly a brilliant write.. Susan |
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Wind
since 2002-10-12
Posts 2981 |
brilliant and so-right insanity is not a crime |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
Vicky, my friend, I agree with all that's been said up there above me!! I've told you before, and I'll tell you again....you are one of the most talented writers I have ever seen in my life. Is there anything or any form of poetry that you can't write, sweet Lady? And everything I've read of yours has perfect words, meaning, rhythm...and everything else that it's supposed to have. In this poem, you said exactly what needs to be said. I wish that every person could read it and learn from it....or at least try to learn. I'm like Karilea said...I'm not there yet, but I'm still trying and working on it. Heart hugs to you, sweet friend Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (08-19-2003 03:29 PM).] |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
I'll print this one and hang it right in front of me so I'll always know when to turn the page. My God Vicky, this one goes straight to my heart and soul. Somebody should write music to this beautiful song. Come here, you'll get lots of knuffels from me Titia Like scattered leaves...my words will flow |
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DarkPoetess New Member
since 2003-08-18
Posts 9PA, USA |
Wow... This is really good. I really liked it since I love to read. Keep it up Dark Poetess |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
So when I have gotten stuck in the past, all I had needed to do was to "Turn the Page"! Now why hadn't thought of that!  Wonderful write, Vicky! EA |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
enjoyed the write of this vick...the message is clear, it flows wonderfully... enjoyed it all thanks for sharing! bunch o hugs, g I want to run naked in the Blue! |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
I know I replied to this.... *confuffled* Anyway, I'm happy I saved this to read until I was in a good mood. It's amazing Vicky, as are you. Kielo I'll never forget you, even though I'm moving on.... |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
loved it |
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