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gemjop Member Elite
since 2002-11-18
Posts 2587Pencilveinia, USA 
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Nausea bait to my breathless sob why do I reference when you are no longer here? Marking the pages of my progress senseless motion the moral to my story is backwards bookmarked These pages are worn and have been lived before I know the same as everybody else Like night sky unable to understand how we came to be here Placing you and I as newest mystery of untamed black expanse Why am I still reading past eye strain burying tear stained cheek missing you beyond magnification Closer the stars seem than me to you . . . Instant karma's gonna get you. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
I am always amazed at the depth and poignancy of your words. Eric |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Closer the stars seem than me to you . perfect closing............liked the whole word arrangement here and sentiment of it all |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Yes gem, I agree . . . that last stanza hit a homerun for sure missed you . . . xxoo |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
How did i miss this, was thinking of you today wondering where youve been..read yer email dammit |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I missed you Gem!! This is me, so me.. Why is it that we are worlds apart but seem to be living the same ordeal? Love it. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
MAJOR Ouch!!!!!!! I am totally feeling this right now, in my life. Things will get better for you, Gemma... life always treats good peolpe well in the end. We are all equal but we’re individually different |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Closer the stars seem than me to you" You ever know, in your heart, that something shouldn't be, but you still want to take your chances? Those lines reminded me of feeling that way... I loved this piece. Susan |
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El_Campeador Senior Member
since 2003-01-29
Posts 761Ohio, USA |
I loved the ending... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Like night sky unable to understand how we came to be here Placing you and I as newest mystery of untamed black expanse Why am I still reading past eye strain burying tear stained cheek missing you beyond magnification Closer the stars seem than me to you ======================= Oh I just love this... love the way you poetically tied in the theme and metaphor with the imagery. Very clever and cool poetess Gem. this ones going in me mothy library.  "How could I stand here with you and not be moved by you." |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
missing you beyond magnification Oh Gemma, that hurts....  Heart hugs to you my friend  Ethel |
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