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The Problematic Disposition of Soulmates in a Finite Universe (rp)
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The Problematic Disposition of Soulmates in a Finite Universe (rp) |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia 
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'Love is proximity' she'd say nails stroking over taught skin teasing waiting for life to flow back self-pleased at her faculty for draining it she smiled petite kisses across his chest 'Soul mates -- no such thing' the student of sociology rendered the notion obsolete 'the heart is merely victim of geography' 'If I hadn't known you since I was born -- if we hadn't lived close enough to Fall -- we'd never have loved like this' she whispered nose buried in his neck Looking back he thinks about it and supposes she was right: --if there was a kind God who made Soul Mates he certainly would put them where they could find each other --eh? |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
grins well the cop-out is that he works in mysterious ways isn't it? The onlything I'll believe, and rightly so is that this is simply fantastic writing..thanks for posting and rp |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Rebel...Loved the ending question in this and the two different points of view...made me smile and wonder the same thing. And then he gave man the idea of building telephones and computers and the world got smaller. It's much easier to find soulmates now then it was in the good old days, I'm sure!  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks for reposting these, Reb. I'm enjoying your work much, and, (smile with me) maybe this time I'll be able to remember them, eh? Sheesh.  I'm still searching the brain cells for survivors.As for love being about proximity...hmmm...I'd be inclined to argue the point. (serenity glances warily over her shoulder)  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
God!  wow! Yes!  love this write, Hawke! Damn, you're good!  |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
What if we really do choose the where and who of birth? A great poem. Loved the title!! *grin* |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
A fine piece, Rebel, a mixture of sensual and seriousness....love this>"'the heart is merely victim of geography'" ..,,good rhythm and fine end lines...ice |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I'm keeping this one. It's an interesting POV, and very different than other soulmate poetry...offering stimulating philosophical rather than romantic thoughts in my mind. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
bumping this. Came back for another read and couldn't find you, so back to the top, just because I hate scrolling. (and hey? at least I remembered reading it! me so proud of me... ) |
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Ceinwyn Member Elite
since 2000-07-09
Posts 2175VA |
I echo what Raph said  I luv stealing his comments er I mean borrowing cos I suck at comments...If at first you don't succeed destroy all the evidence that you tried. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
So many good lines in this, and lots of love and truth. Really nice writing Reb~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
she smiled petite kisses across his chest I like that I am glad to read your words this morning...and to see that new look ... M |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
...Damn! ........just damn! ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
As I am taken completely breathless, all I can do is sigh....... Absolutely gorgeous |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
--if there was a kind God who made Soul Mates he certainly would put them where they could find each other --eh? That would be logical... but what's logical about love? LOL And proximity is different these days. *S* Enjoyed the read, Hawk! *S* |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
Raph -- agree with the first part -- but I'll defer to your judgement on the second.. thanks! Martie -- yes, but I wonder if the age of instant messaging just adds to the pain of it all -- I've heard it's as hard as it ever was. blaze starr -- hahahahaha...  yeah - you replied to this one when it was up before... thanks for following me though -- I had almost forgotten this one myself.Dixie -- you give good reply icebox -- yeah -- what if? we'd be real friggin masochists huh? heh... thank you sir.. title just kind of wrote itself ice -- thanks very much -- but I can't really take credit for that line since it is merely a record of an actual conversation... Midnite -- I'm beyond flattered... thankyou m'lady *bow* blazey -- thanks for the bump -- (shouldn't we have some disco music?) Ceinwyn -- I'm sure you can hold your own -- thanks.. Bluesy -- Much thanx ma'am....appreciate the read.. nakedthinker -- I am grateful for your kind words -- and glad you like the new pic -- the old one never compressed very well -- too many lines not enough pixels Enchantress... DAMN!!  Whisper -- you're too kind I'm sure... Ruthie -- yeah it's pretty illogical aint it? and aint we glad? thankies |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(smiling).... it would seem they should find each other doesn't it... liked this... nicely done, nice indeed. |
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Brad Majors
since 2001-04-03
Posts 2647Georgia |
Its been since the scroll days when I last saw your work. Very cool! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Your wonderful title is a poem unto and of itself!--and I thoroughly enjoyed the follow-through!  Lots of angel food cake for thought! LOL Warm hugs, EA |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
ah yes, one would think so... very tactfully written......honesty was always one of your best qualities, and it shines brightly in your writing *smile* |
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garysgirl
since 2002-09-29
Posts 19237Florida, USA |
--if there was a kind God who made Soul Mates he certainly would put them where they could find each other --eh? But ooohh, Reb, it is soooo goooddddd when they do find each other...wouldn't you think?  Hugs to you, Reb Hawke  Ethel [This message has been edited by garysgirl (07-21-2003 12:03 AM).] |
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Local Parasite
since 2001-11-05
Posts 2527Transylconia, Winnipeg |
I agree with the woman in the poem. Love is mostly a question of proximity... because beneath all the crap that we're smathered with, there's an essential human element which is unchanging... and that is the depth to which love extends. Love is too powerful to be predetermined... but hey, that's my opinion. Nicely written, Reb... Parasite Faith is a fine invention |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
--[quote]if there was a kind God who made Soul Mates he certainly would put them where they could find each other --eh? But he did, if he put them on the same planet. LOL, I just had to read this one again, my graduate homebrewed Philosophy class. Just what you wanted to read, another smartie britches comment. Laugh, it's good for the soul, mate. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (07-21-2003 12:34 AM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
eh...James |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"--if there was a kind God who made Soul Mates he certainly would put them where they could find each other" True story: I was feeling down and could really relate to the song "Angel" by Amanda Perez. In it, it says, "God send me an Angel, to heal my broken heart from being in love." Two months later I met and started dated a man that transfered here. His name? Angel. Susan C. |
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Ringo
since 2003-02-20
Posts 3684Saluting with misty eyes |
LP- I had to read this one a couple of times to really get my own pictures in my head... and I must say that they are truly wonderful pictures indeed. Yet another great job by a great poet. We see the light of those |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Damn Rebel! The title of this sounds like a course I took at Berkley when I was still taking acid! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Local Rebel This has whirled around my head till it turned to dust. Excellent write. |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Well isn't this just the ticket! I especially adore "...if we hadn't lived close enough to Fall..." I can't rip you to shreds on this one (as if I ever did or would ... *s) because my critting skills have a lot to be desired so I can only offer my humble thanks for an excellent poem. I bought my share of mistakes so I might see some interest. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Sometimes, Reb... we just have to listen to the heartstrings. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I enjoyed reading the title! The poem was just an added bonus! Warm hugs, EA |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wouldn't you think? Well done, enjoyed. Sandra |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
the more I think about it, the more I think she may have been right but if there were a kind God, maybe it's his way of moving a body to where it should be, and would have been, if not for past misdirection but then again, I have always heard that you are where you are meant to be... damn, you got me thinking too much again |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
you pack a wallop and love your point of views in understanding how a woman feels...your a great poet...thank you for writing and sharing..... |
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