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Old_Shoe_New_Laces
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0 posted 2003-06-20 01:22 AM



'Flowers for the Dead'


You’ve had your way
and I’ve had mine
and something about sitting
on a park bench in the cold
reminding me of the scent
of your hair
and the look you gave me
nine months ago while
saying goodbye and
closing the car door,
something like waiting
for the wind to pick up,
something like a slow
sad song, a kind of
-blue-
in green, among the snow
and soft boughs
of a swaying maple,
thinking that your eyes
or something in your smile
might ease the ache
like sipping a fine
red wine
into the night.

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with you
1 posted 2003-06-20 01:31 AM


"reminding me of the scent
of your hair
and the look you gave me
nine months ago while
saying goodbye and
closing the car door,
something like waiting
for the wind to pick up,
something like a slow
sad song, a kind of
-blue-"

this just sort of stops you, and holds your heart in pause....it's beautiful

nakdthoughts
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2 posted 2003-06-20 10:35 AM


lovely words, graceful setting

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3 posted 2003-06-21 03:21 AM


I am stunned. I've definitly got to write this one down...Right after I try to write something of my own...I think you just may have given me the certain taste of inspiration that I've been looking for!

I do not know whether I was then a man dreaming I was a butterfly, or whether I am now a butterfly dreaming I am a man.
--Chang Tzu

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4 posted 2003-06-21 03:22 AM


god!
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Gaia
5 posted 2003-06-21 11:45 AM


I feel as if I've sipped that glass red wine alongside you.
Enjoyed the write. BTW, hello! I don't think I've read your work before.

nobody
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6 posted 2003-06-21 01:36 PM


wow that is a truly beautiful poem....
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Saluting with misty eyes
7 posted 2003-06-21 02:07 PM


This is an absolutely amazing write.
I look forward to reading more of your work.

Once in a dream, far beyond these castle walls...

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where the wild flowers grow
8 posted 2003-06-21 02:08 PM


Beautiful words.. so sad!
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9 posted 2008-07-30 05:33 PM


Sad, but Lovely!



ARCTIC WIND

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