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Old_Shoe_New_Laces
Junior Member

since 2003-06-16

Posts 31

0 posted 2003-06-19 03:06 AM

'Something to hold on to'

It is only when,
in the heart of winter,
and all is quiet,
do I feel most
the ache of time.

And sitting here
at the kitchen table
the world has become
but a distant voice
resonating in the wind.

There is the snow
falling silently
through the sky,
a few plates and glasses
on the counter,
the hiss and rattle
of the radiator,
and in the bay window
sit
     three
              white
                       orchid blossoms.

For weeks I have watched
these orchids
waiting for the day
I’d find them dead,
wilted white petals
on a window sill,
mid winter, yet still
they hold on.

There is more poetry
in their presence,
more poetry
in their persistence,
than I shall ever write.

Having said all this,
there is nothing left to do
but grow
silent.

D'sWhisper
Member

since 2003-06-16

Posts 68
Washington, USA

1 posted 2003-06-19 03:54 AM

Oh, this was so quiet. So silent it was flavored with that buzz that takes the place of any disernable sound. And calming. I'm still trying to gather my feelings for this. I'm craving winter now though...this is strong, very strong. Wonderful write. <>DW<>

JilGirl
Member

since 2003-05-24

Posts 364
Washington

2 posted 2003-06-19 03:56 AM

WOW! Terrific write!

the world has become
but a distant voice
resonating in the wind.

Perfect picture and then:

and in the bay window
sit
     three
              white
                       orchid blossoms.
Great spacing, in the right places!

There is more poetry
in their presence,
more poetry
in their persistence,
than I shall ever write.

Having said all this,
there is nothing left to do
but grow
silent.

Wonderful ending!

I truly enjoyed the read!

Till oceans cease to flow and deserts lose their sands, may beauty surround you every day and wealth be in your hands.

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

3 posted 2003-06-19 01:56 PM

incredible! awesome ending

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

4 posted 2003-06-19 02:00 PM

There is more poetry
in their presence,
more poetry
in their persistence,
than I shall ever write.

I liked how you captured the beauty of poetry in the orchids. Very nice~

Earth Angel
Member Empyrean

since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

5 posted 2003-06-19 02:04 PM

I cannot find the words to express how impressive--and soul-touching--this write is.

Very warm hugs,
Earth Angel

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

6 posted 2008-02-23 12:37 PM

Love the Ending

ARCTIC WIND

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