Open Poetry #27 |
Fragments |
wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
A stranger approached me in the darkness of sleep I felt her fingers touch my temples Her thumbs pressed my eyelids closed Soft full lips brushed mine lightly Parted and became hungry When her hands left my face to tangle in my hair freeing me to look at her I could not see [This message has been edited by wranx (06-18-2003 01:25 PM).] |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This reads like the state of mind in between a dream sleep and reality...and the fear that it might all disappear once you open your eyes. Nice writing wranx, as always. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
ah...very cool stuff |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Beware!--A succubus can suck your soul! lol-- Just joking! Hauntingly lovely... Warm hugs, EA |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
sometimes those fragments capture more than the whole, and in the darkness reflect the light from a brilliant soul open your eyes, Ed its better that way even if its scary |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx, You use a subtle palette, enjoyed. |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ed: life just is . . . you know? yes . . . you do you never know what may be on the other side Life is choice freewill and if we never chose we would never live This reads to me about choice maybe I am warped beautiful writing xxoo [This message has been edited by littlewing (06-18-2003 02:03 PM).] |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Wow sir.....what a beautiful piece of a dream....thats how it felt.....dreamy and "peaceful" lovely Lauren~ |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Ooooh....yes!! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
....damn! |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
A dream, is it? peace, Cor |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Didn't mean to wake ya, yeti! |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
I dig this new style Ed..... this is haunting lookin for more... |
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Local Rebel Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-21
Posts 5767Southern Abstentia |
a frustrating dream indeed -- well done |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
A dream full of Passion lol ARCTIC WIND |
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