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Open Poetry #27

first try at a sonnet

Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2003-06-18 12:54 PM

i never written one before,and i dont even know if this is any good..well at least i got the 14 lines in. let me know what you think,and please tell me if i did it wrong thanks

Pain

It grows on me like a weed
its stems onto me like it lives with me
i cast it aside and let it leave me alone
still it comes and i engage with it everyday
no escaping... but without it i couldent
live,without it i wouldent be who i am today
it teaches me a lesson i rather not see,but
in the end i praise it and welcome it towards me
i don't let it own my life,i go on strong and stronger even when it puts its ulgy head upon me.
i am in control of it,i choose to embrace it and think of it as a gift that is given to me. to be truly special and become what i am
to be what i choose,to see the stars shine bright i think I use it i don't let it use me.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....

[This message has been edited by Foxyoasis (06-18-2003 01:07 AM).]

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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1 posted 2003-06-18 04:20 AM

I'm not sure, now don't quote me, but I think a sonnet is composed of 14 lines like this...

1
2
3 rhymes with 1
4 rhymes with 2

5
6
7 rhymes with 5
8 rhymes with 6

9
10
11 rhymes with 9
12 rhymes with 10

13
14 rhymes with 13

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
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2 posted 2003-06-18 04:21 AM

each verse has the ABAB rhyme scheme and the last two lines rhyme

Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

3 posted 2003-06-18 04:32 AM

ahh thanks guys,i tried asking my freind,he just told me it had to have 14 lines

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

4 posted 2003-06-18 10:42 AM

exactly - nice job
both of you

See Nan in Critical Analysis
she is quite amazing
post it there foxy
she will guide you

nice job and awesome for writing
xxoo

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

5 posted 2008-02-22 07:11 PM

First Try you did well!

ARCTIC WIND

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