Open Poetry #27 |
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Replications |
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Old_Shoe_New_Laces Junior Member
since 2003-06-16
Posts 31 |
'Replications' I squint my eyes as you cross your legs from east to west. We have arrived somewhere in time, amongst a desert, near a jungle, at a gas station, next door to a liquor store, next door to an adobe hut with a clothes line and three dirty children standing out front. They scratch their necks with stunted fingers and stare into the sun with black wet eyes, concered with something north or south of us. We are somewhere in America open and exposed like cactus blossoms caught somewhere between the wind and carbon deposits. I think of you and the red dress you wore the day you stepped off that bus. The sky everywhere empty and the sun closer than before. |
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Kaoru![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
I'm honestly at a loss for words, but I'll cover that up with making that the first thing I say. This poem has great power, somehow I was kind of into it before I finished the second line. I really enjoyed it to the core, ![]() |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is a very cool write... creative and unique imagery and personifications..love the last verse's impact. Welcome to Poetry Land..nice to have you here with us. I will keep an eye out for more of your impressive work. No matter what the differences |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
wow... |
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Cpat Hair![]()
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
well done..the imagery is strong the use of words compact, concise and select... enjoyed this... a great deal. |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
fantastic writing |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
love the name! ARCTIC WIND |
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