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Whine Of The Rain (L.S.)
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Whine Of The Rain (L.S.) |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia 
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Whine Of The Rain Forgive me if I sigh just a little to long in your memory If I fall short, for just a second, of reality here Last night I dreamed you were in the clouds to rescue me And, a little life fell from the eyes of sincere... Ever blessed to see true light once more Oh, what a feeling to relive that breeze Remembering was hard on the heart but easy to the eyes Just holding the sweet hands of bitter sleep... I just gasped at what so used to be Died just a little for the angel once sent to me Cried in the arms of the moon hanging overhead Resembling the whine of the rain on forgotten's bed... Forgive me if I drown in my very own sound Thought I could handle any waters weighing down I'm still the same woman just battered and bruised Relying now on sleep to find a part of you... Just praying hard enough not to open my eyes Looking endlessly where maybe your heart might lie I'm falling like the leaves drowning in misery Just as lonely as the whine of the rain could be... Oh, I know hopeless and just how it feels And, I know my midnight journey just wasn't real Not a day goes by when I remember how you were gonna save me Just wish I would have never recognized that familiar breeze... Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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the_loner_23 Member Ascendant
since 2002-06-08
Posts 5479Jacksonville, Florida, USA |
This is so sad but beautifully written Cold hands means a warm heart |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Thank you, the loner 23  means a lot. Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
gawd! ladyfriend, you sure can write! so sad but so beautiful! |
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QjQ Member Elite
since 2003-04-18
Posts 3756U.S.A. |
enjoyed,,, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
"Whine of the Rain"--even your title was poetic! You speak softly of such sadness... Warm hugs, EA |
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David Carrson Junior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 25Carrickfergus N. Ireland |
only when well written can we enjoy reading sadness ....well done |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
And, a little life fell from the eyes of sincere... well all I can say is there are so many lines that I just love here... You do write sad so beautifully. Hugs and I hope you are well Maureen [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (06-24-2003 08:23 PM).] |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
a very bittersweet write...beautifully done |
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Artic Wind Member Rara Avis
since 2007-09-16
Posts 8080Realm of Supernatural |
Very bitter sweet indeed ~ But poetically written with such beauty! ARCTIC WIND |
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