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Corinne
Member Ascendant

since 1999-10-28

Posts 5167
state of confusion

0 posted 2003-06-16 09:00 PM

Mind to Let

There’s a traitor inside my brain –
she plots incessantly behind my mind,
turning a crazy idea over and over
like a puzzle box,
as though all sides together might hold clues.

I tell her answers are not found
in twisting colored blocks,
they shy from sight when viewed straight on,
disappearing like a comet’s tale.

She invades sleep, stabs at dreams
with talons sharp by malcontent.
She’s full of schemes and selfish angles,
certain she can convince me to join
in our plans for escape.

Morning does not soften us.
We do not require sleep,

now that she’s got all of my minds.
© 2003 Core

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

1 posted 2003-06-16 09:04 PM

I know her well

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2003-06-16 09:07 PM

Wow...really liked this,  reminds me of my
muse on some days when it just doesn't come
together....  Really like the ending, all
of your minds....sheesh,  I have enough
trouble with just one overly active one,
let alone..more than 1!!!

Laqe
Member

since 2003-06-15

Posts 72
Michigan, US

3 posted 2003-06-16 09:07 PM

Beautiful imagery. A wonderful poem we all can relate to. Thank you for this post.

.Echo.

dreambuilder
Member

since 2003-03-23

Posts 319
caddyshack

4 posted 2003-06-16 09:14 PM

at times I feel as though
I'm trying to work with a
rubix cube
that has sharp edges

I enjoyed this write
& I'll be looking for more from you

. . . all that we see or seem is but a dream within a dream . . .

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

5 posted 2003-06-16 10:22 PM

Nicely done Core.

Thanks for the peek within

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2003-06-17 03:12 AM

wow...good write

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

7 posted 2003-06-17 07:41 AM

Being a Gemini - I can relate - I really love this piece, Corinne...

zenny
Member

since 2002-11-24

Posts 371
Belgium

8 posted 2003-06-17 07:42 AM

well done

lovely images

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

9 posted 2003-06-17 07:43 AM

Cor.... you know I love the way you put thoughts together and tell the story or paint the image..this is no exception.

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

10 posted 2003-06-17 12:22 PM

Corinne~
Gal ... if there's room to let in that mind of yours ... I'm sending a deposit !!!

GREAT write my friend~
*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

11 posted 2003-06-17 12:39 PM

all of your mind huh? I really enjoyed this one, probably because I have felt this way many times.

M

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

12 posted 2003-06-17 12:41 PM

I like this very much, Cor... think we've all known that traitor at one time or another... she must have quite a mind collection by now. *S*

J. K. Mitchell
Member

since 2002-01-12

Posts 311
GA

13 posted 2003-06-17 12:44 PM

Woah...I'm really feeling this.
Excellent write!

"Cuidado con mi corazon."--R. Martin

Artic Wind
Member Rara Avis

since 2007-09-16

Posts 8080
Realm of Supernatural

14 posted 2008-02-07 05:53 PM

Very Much Enjoyed

ARCTIC WIND

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